Lawd Jesus I hope don't nobody die, don't nobody need to die!

AUGH RORY WHY ARE YOU SO DUMB!
(This story has be overly emotionally invested, ahhhmazing!!!)

Can't wait for more. This gets better and better.

Omg if Vic die I don't know what I'm going to do! Don't do it to me *sniffs* don't do it.. :(

So, they're young, Rory and Vic; their brains are all-sex all the time, thus their hooking up so soon after Rory's even allowed him to kind-of be her guy makes sense to me. But for a character like Rory, who would rather have a one-off, her rapidly intensifying relationship with Vic seems...a little out of whack. Like she'd at least try harder to keep her guard up with him, the guy trying so desperately to get past that guard. Maybe it's just me, but that's how guarded people usually react, and they carry on with the charade for as long as they can or until the person in pursuit gives up. ^_^

And who is the mysterious speaker?

The amount of Vic-description takes away from the story as we see him too often to need reminding. For me, describing the world these characters inhabit would be more effective than repeatedly describing the characters themselves.

Do you have a Beta reader? I believe one would really help with the few errors I've been able to pick out. “I can’t. I’m about to dance Rory.” You see, the word "with" would complete this sentence. Missing or misused words are an example of the common issues from one chapter to the next. Repetitive words and phrases, like "baritone," "ghost of a smile" and Rory's comments on Vic's eyes, are another issue.

I guess the heat supposedly came from Vic and Rory in the woods, but it could also be the mystery speaker. I shall see.

"She emphasized the word like I was piece of shit..." Oh, Rory, you pretty much THINK of yourself the same way.

I sincerely hope Scar, whom I like thus far, isn't the best friend who is secretly in love with Vic. She is better than that, I feel. If she is just being protective, I will be thrilled by that, being the Mama Cheetah that I am.

So Rory is afraid of the dark, then? And Vic has perfect, precise timing, he is always hanging 'round when Rory could have need of him. Is he watching her, I wonder, for her safety. Because there are only a few ways I could see this going. He is obsessed with her, which isn't likely. He knows about her powers, which would be skeevy a bit because then maybe that's the only reason he's showing any interest. Or he sought her out to protect her (and other like him) from Luminous and the Dancer Dude but ending up liking what he saw a little too much. All theory, of course.

Which brings me to Vic and Rory's relationship. WHy is it developing so quickly? I know he messes with her on a molecular level but her letting her guard down, with hos especially paranoid she's been this entire time, doesn't seem right to me. Doesn't feel organic.

I like Scar, though, and I look forward to seeing more of her.

Enjoying it, I am, mm-hm.

Oh, rubbing the back of his neck, the surest sign of "I'm hot but I really like you so I'm nervous" anywhere! It is a pet peeve of mine.

Stalking only has the opportunity to be sexy in fiction. Good thing for Vic, who I grow fonder of by each line, that this is what it is.

Again, Rory and her snap judgements. It is a good character flaw for a character in a romance, especially one whose life has been spent in situations with less than trustful folks. However, Vic isn't giving up, a trait I enjoy. Plus, he is on it when it comes to responses. I love someone who can keep a converation going.

The daner dude from Onyx, am I correct? And Vic knows him BECAUSE he has mega-awesome super-powers, too, right?

My favorite scene thus far was little more than a snippet in the chapter as a whole. Because, if that woman was who I believe she is, Rory should have allowed her to buy her a drink. The polyamorous relationship between Rory, Vic and Luminous Eyes (whose name I do not know for sure) has to start somewhere, after all. This chapter was shorter than the rest and therefore I haven't much to say. Rory is in college, she loves music and dancing, she is a regular and possibly bartender-for-hire as well as being magical. Much of that I already knew but her love for music really made me smile. A woman after my own heart.

There is news, however; this chapter, with the dancing guy and Luminous Eyes entering the picture, was the first time I flashed back to the preface. Their arrival evokes the same darkness. I look forward to seeing where they ALL go.

Rory has come alongxway but she still has a lot to learn. Vic was right in his assessment to f her actions today. She has to learn to follow directives. I love this story!!

Nate caught some feelings for Rory kni wing that she was fighting feelings for Vic. Nate I lovevyou but the spastic mood changes around Rory need to change. Vic forgave Scarlett much to quickly she put everyone in danger. I don't trust her!

Yeah, see? No zombies.

I was hooked because of this word: simian. Primates, I LOVE them, so that scene with her in the campus book store managed to float my boat. Turk? Not so much, because ONLY LL can get away with licking his lips, especially so much! I lick my lips and it is not sexy...it's dry. Not cute.

This beginning was not what I expected from the preface; the beginning of chapter one was surprisingly lighthearted in contrast. Yes, the character dropped a few cuss words and hinted at a past as a juvenile delinquent but, still, she was not a brooding character. I enjoyed that. And I liked her monologue on being loose. It isn't a bad thing when you don't want a relationship, I am a firm believer in that.

Her...relationship with Kyra, love her and her son's names (by the way), was refreshing in that it wasn't at all a trip into best-friends-forever-land. I like that their relationship is as it always was, one of necessity from jump. Fantastic.

Is Vic your hero, I wonder?

Rory's blue hair is fabulously luminous and her nose ring hints at some cheek, which I am looking forward to.

Vic, at least in that picture, gets a 10 on the Scale of Sex. We'll see if his character matches up. Fingers crossed! Sexy, sarcastic characters are always a pleasure.

Tatiana looks interesting, like a goddess illuminated from the inside. These three should have a threesome, and in my mind they will. ^_^