Really enjoy this view of Sabretooth. Please update.
Thanks Drea. Me too, I always thought he was a cocky sexy ass muthafucka. Just wanted to show my point of view. I have most of the story written in notes just been updating my other ones. I'll try to post a chapter on this one soon. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.Reviewer: Drea Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 05:40 pm
That was hot. You seem to have no apprehensions about writing a love scene. I still get so embarrassed writing them. Lol
Girl, as long as my mama ain't reading it , I'm good. I think my sex scenes are raw but yours are more like poetry that comparison to be dangerous/dying was freaking HOT! and narrated by Alessadro. Damn. I'm fanning myself right now thinking about it. LOL!Reviewer: azzure1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 06 2014 02:15 am
Some relationships starts off fast and feral as crazy as it may seem. It may have started as a fling which turned into the most primal passion.Jazz truly has herhand in the cookie jar and this time it might just stay there. Neither are shy about their wants and needs and do.what ever it takes to get them. The things they do and say to one another can turn anyone into an animal. That's fine with me , the wilder the better. Keep at it.
I am so glad you enjoyed it! I love me an alpha male but also love when a woman isn't shy about what she wants and can dish it out too. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :-)Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05 2014 05:55 am
I have a huge place in my heart fir the comic book universe, it is my weakness as much as reading fiction fan and not. Good to see there aee more comic book fans on the chamber than I exlected. I actually overlooked this at first and how bad I feel after reading chapter one.I recently just got back into the comic universe after a long hiatus. Anyhow it was a treat fir the mind as well as feeding my curiosity. The warnings did lttle to keep me away.
I like it so far and sure will.continue to enjoy as this tale continues. The funny thing about the past is that it eventually comes back to the surface. So much for.moving on, the changes of that are dwindling with each smirk and stare as well as dialogue that comes from.their lips. Victor is a man that knows what he wants, that's a great trait for a man to.have.
I am so glad you got to read it this time. Big Shout out to you for being a comic book fan. Pressures on. LOL! I am trying to include as much of the "real" stuff going on in the comics as possible. Like Mystique buying Madripoor from Hydra and trying to make it a mutant sanctuary. It's so good to see other Comic book fans here especially woman. Thank you for reading and reviewing.Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 05 2014 05:45 am
Ok. Hooked. Love it. Xeah.
Thank you so much!!Reviewer: Bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 04 2014 06:30 pm
That was hot!! Don't like her father! Where is her mom, is she dead? Damn Victor is fine!!
pmgayles!! That was a lot of action piled into one chapter. Jazz's mother and father's story will come out in the upcoming chapters. Hells yeah Victor is Fine!!Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: July 04 2014 02:50 pm
Damnnnn!! Back with a vengence on this chapter. This was well worth the wait so great job. Please post soon, I can't wait for more.
Ps. I love the hot flashback, very unique to give the past and present so detailed and well placed. Also, love the dress :D
Thank you :-) for your comlpiments. I felt like we needed to understand their steamy past to know why Jazz gets so hot and bothered around Victor. I really enjoy writing this and appreciate you reading and reviewing it. Thank you.Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 04 2014 11:07 am
Ooooooooh I like this story so far! I like how you have victor creed as dominating and possessive it's kinda hot lol and Jessie palveka is the perfect man to portray him omg he's so sexy! I want more please update!!!!!!!
I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm hoping to have an update by next week. Thanks for reading and reviewing.Reviewer: Heartless808 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29 2014 08:49 pm
the characters are so hot! really looking forward to this story developing
Thanks so much for taking the time to read it and reviewing it.Reviewer: naytherocker Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 29 2014 12:33 am
First off D'Angelo's my lady played while I read and I just find that appropriate you have no idea how much I love the dominant male "that's my pussy" types
Me too, Sabertooth is my ultimate dominate, arrogant,"that's my shit and don't mess with it or I'll fuck you up" male. Thank you for reading and reviewing.Reviewer: KayMay Signed [Report This]
Date: June 28 2014 08:38 am
Omg! That man is fine. Who is he in real life? Lol I grew up watching X-Men. I am looking forward to reading more.
I know, right?! His name is Jessie Pavelka, he a fitness model/ trainer. Thanks for reading and reviewing.Reviewer: azzure1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 28 2014 01:57 am
I only read Superman and Batman comicbooks so I didn't know Sabertooth was that damn fine! LAWD HAVE MERCY!!! Hot dog I love the man that you have casted as Victor. Please continue!!!
pmgayles!! Girl I love me some Bruce Wayne too. But there's something about an arrogant, cocky, alpha male, with the killer instincts and knows how to use them that is extremely HOT!! Thank you for reading.Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 03:04 pm
I'm a big comic book nerd and I've always had a thing for gambit. This was well done and has opened my eyes towards sabertooth. Please keep going I loved it.
I liked gambit too, cajun accent,edge of being a bad boy. irritated by the thing he had with rogue. If you ever read the Age Of Apocalypse series, Sabertooth is actually good but keeps his personality and is drawn really well. I really liked him in that series.Thank you for reading and reviewing it.Reviewer: samewar Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 01:31 pm
Great job, I am hooked already. LOL!! I can't wait to see where this leads, this is a very orginial plot and character. The comic verison of characters are rarely done and this hot!!
Please post again soon :D
Thank you sweetlooking218. I'm glad you liked it, I'm working on the next chapter right now so hopefully post by next week. Thanks for reviewing.Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 12:47 pm
Good start! I wonder what kept Victor away from Jazz for so long...was it because of Mystqiue or Magneto? In your story were Mystique and Victor ever together? Oh wait don't tell me! I want to be surprised!
I can't wait to read what you have in store for Jazz and Sabertooth!
Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you like. I'm really excited about this story.Reviewer: Zsa-Zsa Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 07:27 am
Well I am liking it so far. I can't wait to see what happens next. If Jazz is engaged then y haven't she had sex in a year? What is the real reason Victor has come back, I bet it has something to do with her family's business?
Can't wait to read more,
O kimyso so many questions. Some of those will be answered in the next chapter which I'm working on right now. Thank you for reading and reviewing.Reviewer: kimyso Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 07:27 am
Im really excited for a creed story. This site is severely lacking in them. That being said I think your writing could use a bit of toning.
Dont let the main character show much of her life/uper hand in rushed dialogue. Maybe let it play out. Slowly reveal to the reader that she has a fiance or that she is a trained assassin.
For example. When victor said he would be back tomorrow dont make plans. Jazz couldve said something along the lines of her not allowing him to take her of course. Then the next vhapter would be her going through her day. MeetiMeeting her dad at lunch then discussing what will hapoen. Then maybe her meeting up with her fiance and victor finding out about him that way cuz he stalks her and idk that seems like what your version of victor would do.
There are so many possibilities and roads to take I think you should just be slow and easy wi th your reveal.
Thank you, Thank You, Thank You. I really appreciate this kind of review. I know I do have a tendency to reveal too soon, I think it's because I hate some stories that drag it on too long so I try not to do that. I think this was the first chapter and I wanted to keep the readers interested too. Thank you for the advice. I'm working on the next chapter right now and will hopefully post by next week, I hope you continue reading and would love to see your review on it. Thank you again.Reviewer: vulgarviper Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 07:14 am
Great start! Continue please
Thank you for reading and reviewing, I'm working on the next chapter right now so I'll hopefully will post by next week.Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 07:02 am