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Title: Chapter 17

Thanks for the update enjoying the story

 Reviewer: jomoli Signed [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 08:37 pm
Title: Chapter 17

I hope Debs gets her ass whooped. 

 Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 07:36 pm
Title: Chapter 17

Why are the chapters so short or is that the story is so good, I read too fast? Please continue your story, I want to see how it ends for Camille, Hiraman and baby Savy

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 05:47 pm
Title: Chapter 17

Why would you want to be with someone who obviously does not want to be with you? 

 Reviewer: darqchild69 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 04:47 pm
Title: Chapter 17

I am such a happy reader right now!!   Debbie is such ho!!  I wonder what favor will she be asking those her friends for?  I hope that it backfires on her dumb ass!! Hiram is my hero and I want their family to be safe!!  Excellent!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 04:19 pm
Title: Chapter 16

What can I say? This is really a good story. Please update soon.

I can't wait for Hiram's mother, Debbie and the klans get a dose of their medicine.

It is time for some good to come to Camille, Hiram and Savannah.

I noticed you had in your overview there were 20 chapters. Your story ended with 16 chapters. Where are the other four?

 Reviewer: Cassie Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 01:03 pm
Title: Prologue

This is a good story. When is the update coming?

The old saying, "something in the milk is not clean." Savanna's color is in somebody's roots! It would be really good if Ruth found out that black was in her family as well as her husband's.

 

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 12:43 pm
Title: Chapter 16

Great story

Update story soon.

You have us hanging on pins and needles. We can't wait to see what the next chapters hold.

It is time for Camille and Hiram to experience some happiness.

 

 

 Reviewer: Laya Anonymous starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 12:34 pm
Title: Chapter 16

I absolutely love you book...The character match so well and the story flow quit well.  thank you for sharing your gift.

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 08:02 am
Title: Chapter 16

This is definitely one of my favorite story's on here. 

 Reviewer: Carriekiara Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 07:16 am
Title: Chapter 16

That was awesome!!  I really want them to move sooner rathet than later.  It is about to get ugly courtesy of that dumb ho Debbie! Is it wrong to all of them dead? Starting with Debbie and Ruth of course leaving the children alive.  I love this story!!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 09:21 pm
Title: Chapter 16

Thank you for posting. Please, keep that ink 'flowing. =)

 Reviewer: SeekingVirtue17 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 09:08 pm
Title: Chapter 16

Yes, please let everything work out fine for this litte family... I am getting very worried about what Hiram's family is up to. I only hope they are safe and far away before they try anything.

 

Great Job!! Please post again soon :D

 Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 08:20 pm
Title: Chapter 16

They need to hurry up and leave.

 Reviewer: jackson1973 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 08:11 pm
Title: Chapter 16

They're so perfect omg I'm fangirling right now!!!!

 Reviewer: brookedoe Signed [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 07:02 pm
Title: Prologue

Your story is begging to be featured. I'm suprised it isn't already. I love everything about Cam and Hiram, the dynamic between all of the characters, and the background of their lives. You have a gem here. Your talent March is undeniable.

 Reviewer: Noni Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 06:05 pm
Title: Chapter 16

I hope there is black in the family---on the mom's side; Debbie would leave H alone.  I think the little family should move ASAP!  They can skpe their interviews.

 Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 04:56 pm
Title: Chapter 16

Harim has a right to be edgy especially since Debbie is up to no good & his night mare sounds like something she would do. Glad to see the chemistry between Cami & Harim growing although I don't think she still thinks she's pretty enough I can't wait til see how he proves her wrong by telling her & showing her just how attracted he is to her & not just for the babies sake.

 Reviewer: kvgurl Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 04:12 pm
Title: Chapter 16

They need to get the hell out of this hick town. There lives are in danger. Savannah looks are enough to stir up enough mess. I don't think the Klan can handle the truth.

 Reviewer: juno Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 01:47 pm
Title: Chapter 16

they better start saving up lol

 Reviewer: Heleana503 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 01:22 pm
Title: Chapter 16

I have been enjoying this story but the Klan meetings and flashbacks to Klan activities are detracting from the romance/baby angle. It's more interesting to see Hiram and Camille react to confrontations with Klan members (and busybody church ladies). 



Author's Response:

Thanks JFJD the reason I show flashbacks and meetings is to show where and how Hiram and Camille grew up. It

explains why they act the way they do now as adults. The Henderson sisters will be making a future apperance for sure.

Since I have to show the whole year through out the story I figured that I'd have things leading up and supporting the 

budding romance between the two of them. Trust me the sexual tension is starting to get high something will happen

soon I promise.

 Reviewer: JFJD Signed [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 12:58 pm
Title: Chapter 16

Great update!  I hope they can move before the Klan attacks!

 Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 11:12 am
Title: Chapter 16

I Love This Story! Thank You for writing it!

 Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 09:59 am
Title: Chapter 16

Great chapter.

 Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 09 2014 09:19 am
Title: Chapter 15

Glad to see you're back writing and that you didn't let the haters stop you. I want to see Camille and Hiram seal the deal. How long do I have to wait! LOL.

Author's Response:

You know what Pen to Paper I am glad I didn't stop. My thing is fine you made your point but I can also write

 

my story how I see fit but at this point they're just trolling the comments and setting off a negative vibe. I'm

 

not forcing them to read the story either so I don't know what the problem is. They can always write thier own

 

story as opposed to complaing about mine. Ironically enough most of the ones leaving negative comments

 

either don't have an account or they haven't written thier own stories bascially hypocrites. Smh. As for the

 

passioniate love scene between Hiram and Camille I do have to wrote the whole year of the story so it will get

 

there eventually I'm just dipping into October and I have to write through July of the follwing year. So please

 

stay tuned. Thanks

 

 Reviewer: Pen to Paper Signed [Report This]
Date: November 08 2014 07:26 pm


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