Loved it as usual. Although I did not find it really meaty especially toward the end it was a great read. I did not appreciate the name Croy/Kroy but after reading your explanation I got over that. Thank you for sharing and I really hope you consider a follow up to this story. The characters were great and I would love to see more of them.Reviewer: MissCO Signed [Report This]
Date: November 19 2014 05:58 pm
I just love it love it this story was so good them surprising her with the gun was nice but her family, the dress, & then The wedding that was the top awesome. Those sexxy men couldn't wait they had to get her preggers right away. Although I do think Gio & Salvo killed their wives some way & it wasn't just a car accident but regardless all things turned out for the best they got tomeet their fathers secret families & Croy gave birth to Twin girls first then Twin boys .Reviewer: kvgurl Signed [Report This]
Date: November 16 2014 02:04 pm
I really tried to like your story because I love the idea behind it but, I found that the pace of time in your story to be extremly fast, to the point where I was not attached and could not connect to your main characters.
Throughout the story it felt like there were missing pieces in the constrcution of their relationship and even the main characters themselves.
At the end of this story, I am honestly more interested in Angela than in Croy, and that is probably because she may seem more realistic and human than Croy.
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Date: November 16 2014 02:00 pm
Those three are a hot mess, actually those families are a hot mess. I was truly entertained by this story. Hot men always make my day!! Are we to assume that with each pregnancy both men were the fathers? If give this story two thumbs up!!! Thank you for sharing your talent!Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: November 16 2014 01:21 pm
they are just like their fathers and their fathers take after their grandfather, i wonder if their fathers are going to tell them about their brothers and sisters. i really enjoy reading this story and i'm looking forward to the next chapter!Reviewer: sandradee Signed [Report This]
Date: November 14 2014 04:35 am
...I tried, I really did but your writing needs work. Some things are choppy and at times, the sentences seem juvenile. " Her stomach wasn't a pudge but she wanted to lose some pounds and thanks to her weekly jogs with Kevin, her stomach was flat and she was on her way to having some abs. ". I mean, it should really juvenile and not well polished. Glad that you're writing but try to look at some English journals or writer's guide to make your sentence structure more succint.Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 13 2014 10:11 pm
I'm really torn with your story.
At first I really enjoyed it, specially your writing stryle. But the last chapters seems so unrealistic and fast, that I'm a little lost.
How come as a badass gangster Todd sleeps in the nude (don't get me wrong I really appreciate this one ;) with his gun under his pillow but anyone can enter his house without passcode or even a key ?
And I don't know why but Croy seems to... dare I say fictional ? I don't mind the threesome/triangle/ ménage à trois relationship : it was hot. But when you put the twin FBI duo, and the agent that is married but still wants her as his mistress in the mix, I was skeptical. It's like she's the perfect woman that anyone wnats or need and like she can spark obsession, admiration lust and love just by being there.
I got that she s beuatiful but she sound like juste that beautiful. I can't connect with bher chracter.
Or maybe I should read another the story from the start ^^
And at the change of character towards a gangster wife was too fast in my opinion, I was lost. It like there are mising pieces in the constrcution of their relationship or even in Croy character itself.
But i'll keep reading cause I like the way you write and I'm curious to read more.
Keep the good work :)Reviewer: Toimemetusais Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 13 2014 02:58 pm
all of that happened...fast.
uhm alright lol
can't wait for next update (:
yeah, fast. Kevin has been building his case agains Todd and Seth for a long time now. Croy being involved was completely by chance. He had to keep up pretenses with the fake family and stuff. I'm sure the FBI goes all out with their stings.Reviewer: emynence Signed [Report This]
Date: November 12 2014 05:27 am
Omgoodness!!!!! I was not expecting that...please please update soon!
lol!!Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 12 2014 03:16 am
LOL!! Todd is something else. I laughed so hard on that last part. I really Seth amd Cory together. I am not sure what to make of Todd yet. I am SOOO mad at Kevin or what the hell his name is. I hope he is not coming back.
Please post again soon. Great job :D
Todd is too much! lol the cop is what I call Kevin/Rodney. he was wrong for using Croy!Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 12 2014 01:12 am
What a twist?! Did not see that one coming. Can't await to see how this one plays out. Still waitng for the rest of Cam's story too.
...you just put me on blast! lololol
I just added another chapter of Cam's story for you!Reviewer: d3stin2l0v3 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 12 2014 12:30 am
Oh my my my that was a hot Croy got both hot guys after her although Seth. Has had her. He waited 3months now that's something. She's scared and that's understandable but she knows they would never hurt her. Now Kevin the cop that's another oh my what's gonna happen when the already possessive jealous cousins who've claimed her for themselves find out he wants her to. Update this story is great
Seth is a good guy. He knew he'd have to wait for Croy. The sheriff though, he doesn't care about the cousins. He wants Croy lol thanks for the comments!!Reviewer: kvgurl Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2014 06:17 pm
Wow, this story us HOT, Lol I wish I had Croy's issue, having two fine men want me, what's a girl to do... Greet them at the door Naked
Can't wait for more.
lol I know right!! Naked as the day!!Reviewer: liberty lady Anonymous [Report This]
Date: November 10 2014 11:26 pm