Interesting start so far. I know you said that you need a beta and I hope that someone can help you soon. Until then, I suggest you read read your chapters so you can catch the obvious stuff like mispelling of names and possessive nouns, etc. Thanks for sharing.
Reviewer: Dee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 24 2015 02:28 am
I am glad that Zaire and Eli got away but not for long. I love Adrian and his Wolf they are funny together. Also Adrian is one scary dude, killing the man that worked for him and smiling as he did so...damn that is mean. Thanks
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: April 18 2015 09:28 pm
I can't believe the Mayor himself went off because she did a damn good at her job and took him down. Usually, they would be praising you for that. How interesting that he finds his mate in the one person that took his brother down. I wonder how Conrad is giong to feel about this. Dang, he killed someone becuase they couldn't find her. Wow. Does he find her?
Reviewer: KeiKei Signed [Report This]Date: April 11 2015 02:04 pm
Why did she pick Scotland? How many black folks reside in Scotland? How she lay low and protect her son if she can't be inconspicuousness?
Author's Response:
If you're searching for a city raised black woman whose family resides in Florida and Texas. Would you search Scotland first?
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: April 08 2015 07:01 pm
Loving this story so far! More please.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: April 05 2015 05:56 am
That was awesome and I can't wait to read more!!!
Reviewer: kimyso Signed [Report This]Date: April 03 2015 08:15 pm
I remember this story! I could not think of the name of it to do a search and always wondered what happened to it. I think I did read it on the other site because more of what happened since I read the first three chapters. Thanks for posting!! I cannot wait for more..
Reviewer: OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 02 2015 12:03 pm
Can't wait for more.
Reviewer: Jaye Sims Signed [Report This]Date: April 02 2015 12:11 am
Whoo ! What a Great start. Can't wait to read more.
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: April 02 2015 12:07 am
I remember reading this story on Lit! Glad to see it here! I'm loving where this story could possibly go. Adrian is not one to mess with, but he found his match in Zaira. Hmmm...makes me curious as to why Eli took to Adrian so fast. Just a few typos here and there, but they aren't a detriment to the story. Keep up the great work!
Reviewer: brown_mocha Signed [Report This]Date: April 01 2015 10:51 pm
Loving this so far!
Reviewer: naytherocker Signed [Report This]Date: April 01 2015 09:29 pm