Title: Chapter 4: IHOP TALKS
Let me just say...Bella is a mess! I love her!!
Overall it was good. Now, I usually don't give advice on formatting, grammar or what have you, because alot of the writers are sensitive (I'm one) but I also believe if it comes from a good place, then its golden. So here's my 2 cents...
Be sure to give your update a thorough proofread before you click that add story button. Then you will be able to snatch the mistakes. Just keep in mind that no matter how many times you go over it, some will slip by you. That's just how it normally goes, so don't go all caa-caa. lol.
On the large paragraph issue...This might sound cray- but I believe that we all write to a certain rhythm. So when I'm faced with a large para' I will read it out to myself and when I sense that those few lines have made a certain point across or have made a good stopping point. Then, I will double deuce that ENTER button.
Well that all I got right now. That's my 2pennies.
Can't wait for the next update. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much i appreciate all your help!!! Yess yes yess, Bella is my drive i will admit i love the kid ha!! but im not a normal writer in any sense English has never been my strong suit but i do love it :)
Believe me i am so scared to put my un edited work out here but i do read it at least 10 times, idk you know how sometimes you just need an extra set of eyes to see whats not working right!! but i like to sleep on my chapters as well, if i think somthings perfect at 1am im probably going to hate it at 12pm so i make sure i read them multiple times in different settings, but some mistakes will always get away unfourtionatly.
My large para issue is slowly working itself out. I am a college student so i write in para form ALL the time, dialogue isint my strong suit YET! but im getting there, and i completly agree with everything you say, i try to cut them off but it never really happened in this chapter. lol
THANK YOU SOOOOO MUCH FOR READING AND HELPING!! it honestly means sosososososo much you dont even know. Your 2pennies will be well spent i promise. Thanks again and stay tuned :)
Reviewer: Elizablu Signed
Date: February 15 2013