Penname: swirly_girl [Contact]

Real name: Ny

Member Since: August 04 2014

Membership status: Member

Bio:

Trying my hand at a childhood dream. Hopefully, you'll like my style.




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[Reviews - 286]
Summary:

SEQUEL to Sasha: the Wallflower. Adaline Lang is an up and coming photographer with more than her own set of problems. During her cousin's wedding she comes face-to-face with the man that she had fallen in love with as a child. Only to find out he was in love with someone else. What will she do to finally be heard and convince him that the perfect women he has been looking for is standing right in front of him?

Dominic Vikhrov is caught between a rock and a hard place. The woman he has fawned after for so many years has finally returned to the United States. But he isn't the only one who is fighting for her heart. Never one to lose, Dominic has his eye on the prize no matter the cost. But will his tunnel vision blind him to something even greater?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:No
Word count: 37246
Read Count: 40809
Published: October 24 2014
Updated: November 20 2015


Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

I agree Sha2011. He needed to completely let go of Dina. This heave ho should do it... If not then his pursuance of Dina is annoying.

Thanks for this last chapter.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: April 07 2015

Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10

I want Adaline to find happiness without Dominic with another guy.

Please let Carla's husband discover her intentions for their move; have a backbone and pride and when the truth comes out about her real feelings.

Slade has to work to get back into Dina's good graces, really work.

And Dominic really has no right to tell Slade. I understand his guilt out of knowing, but still it really isn't his business.

well those are my thoughts.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: November 19 2015

Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

I was wondering when you would let the thundering lightening bolt of "duh/realization" hit her on the head. 

Please, please let her move on with Murphy and Carter. This girl has yet to realize her worth. Um her snooty cousin is coming back and Adealine has to gird up her backbone and self-esteem.

I think Dom needs a tablespoon of the "Sasha 3 yr. abstinence" cure. I can't say prevention, because his jerkiness, coward-ness, and pathetic personally has already been established.

(Great story lines, I love the build up of this story!)

Please make him suffer and wake up and smell the coffee late. Please.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: July 20 2015

Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

No, I like what you did. You see, Dominic is due to suffer heartache; and Dina doesn't count. Please make sure Adaline stays strong. Let his rejection fuel her determination to move on to a real relationship with Murphy or some other guy (a good guy) beyond Dominic. Dom's rich, handsome, and entitled. Yeah, Dina broke his heart, but he needs to realize that Adaline is the "one that got away." He deserves to go through it over Adaline... Especially for Carla's (miss entitled) benefit. Please make him act like a damn fool for Adaline, he so deserves her disregard. Yeah, Dom is a nice guy, but he never stood up for in the past, he needs to an up... publicly.

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Date: July 21 2015

Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11

Of course they can have friendship, plz let her settle on someone else... I want this to drive him nuts... Yep, it must happen.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: November 21 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 151]
Summary:

Ezekiel's parents took extreme measures to keep him hidden from his controling racist grandfather.  Ezekiel was adopted and raised by Rosa a black woman and his life is now about to take a drastic change.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 11832
Read Count: 40498
Published: November 06 2014
Updated: June 17 2015


Title: Ezekiel Black

Love this story. Please publish it as an ebook on Amazon KDP.com

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: October 26 2015

Title: Ezekiel Black

Great unique story. Funny too.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: October 04 2016

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[Reviews - 53]
Summary:

He was a bad boy who was used to getting whatever he wanted.

She was the good girl who refused to bow down to his ways.

Together they clashed.

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Dark Fic
Series: None
Chapters: 6
Completed:No
Word count: 9292
Read Count: 10875
Published: December 01 2014
Updated: March 16 2015


Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: The argument

I tjink i'm confused. Did he not get HIS girlfriend attscked her first? Its like he heard half of what she said. His comment was good, but it didn't really fit with the conversation.  I like this story and where I think u r going with it, but u need an editor/beta reader.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: December 09 2015

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 30]
Summary:

Years of craving can only end in satisfaction. Kory Lane and Kai Wu will soon learn that not all cravings can be appeased.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Erotica, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Original Characters, Rape, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 3
Completed:No
Word count: 16033
Read Count: 5582
Published: February 04 2015
Updated: July 10 2016


Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning

Nice fast start.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: February 18 2015

Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I love a dominant guy. Great two paragraphs. I like how you don't drag along the sex scenes.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: February 03 2016

Rated: Mature Content
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[Reviews - 84]
Summary:

 

 

 

 

 

Zaira Jacobs and Eli Jacobs (her son) runs away from their past, from the pain, and from a 6 foot 4 German (Adrian Hitzag).

 

However, Adrian is not too eager to let his beloved mate escape from his grasp.

 

Follow the story of a determine mother, a curious son, and a possessive German.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: Supernatural
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Fantasy, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: BDSM, Dark Fic, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed:No
Word count: 24066
Read Count: 43605
Published: April 01 2015
Updated: January 07 2016


Title: Chapter 8: Darkness, take me please[7]

I like the story, even when I read it on Lit. It's kind of rough around the edges, but the skeleton of it is good.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: December 04 2016

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[Reviews - 78]
Summary:

Her mistake was underestimating his obsession with her.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Active
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Dark Fic
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:No
Word count: 24639
Read Count: 40335
Published: April 23 2015
Updated: July 14 2016


Title: Chapter 2: Chapter two

I think I like this one.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: May 03 2015

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[Reviews - 256]
Summary:

Working as a Home Health Aide and struggling to make ends meet. All Aries Washington wanted to do was prove the child she had three years ago, was in fact the son of Cameron Marino. She didn't have any delusions about them putting their differences aside and falling madly in love. Why would she? Cameron was engaged to her ex best friend Ambrosia, A.K.A Ms. Perfect. So imagine her surprise when he not only demands she moves in with him, but marry him too.

Aries had no idea that once she gave birth to her own little Marino, that, that meant she automatically belonged to the whole Marino family. With a group of people who take their strong family ties seriously, she's about to find out that once your in, there's no out. 

 



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Family, Romance, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Original Characters, Sexual Content
Series: Marino Family
Chapters: 12
Completed:No
Word count: 19092
Read Count: 53286
Published: May 14 2015
Updated: June 01 2015


Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 10

good story, not the norm of a romance. It's refreshing that writers can still come up with original romance stories. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: February 06 2016

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Summary:

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Chance Gyllenborgh seems to have it all. A pregnant, loving girlfriend, a close knit family, and great life.

 

Angelina Walker is running. She's a top chef and restaurantuer and a workaholic. She throws herself into work to avoid her personal life. Needing a break, she settles down in a town and meet a variety of different people, including Chance.

 

Things seem great at first glance but Below The Surface is where monsters lie and sociopaths dwell.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Erotica
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 14
Completed:Yes
Word count: 58269
Read Count: 48923
Published: May 21 2015
Updated: January 22 2016


Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

Great romance, the impending HEA was a bit rushed, but hey I'd buy it anyway.

rally enjoyed Angelina's personality and Chance's too. Great chemistry.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: January 21 2016

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 75]
Summary:

Clark E. has always been the mysterious one out of all of his friends. With a new company on the rise and heartbreak in his past he has many doubts about women. Taking a chance and from the suggestion of his good friend he goes online and starts a romance with Katrina.

Katrina is the ugly duckling that has been named in her family. Living in the shadows of her older sister and cousin she becomes closed off from the outside world. Her only escape is the internet that gives her confidence. She makes a fake profile pretending to be someone else but then starts to develop feelings for Clark.

What happens when these two get to meet in the real world?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Inspirational, Romance
Story Status: None
Pairings: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8
Completed:No
Word count: 8175
Read Count: 13733
Published: May 23 2015
Updated: August 03 2016


Title: Chapter 1: Cast

Great pics, but who is who in the story?



Author's Response:

In my chpater notes of the cast I have each name listed in order with each picture and you can sroll over the pic to see the name also. 

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: October 04 2015

Title: Chapter 5: Diggers & Dates

I like this story, but please give her a backbone eventually. I understand her tormentors have torn her down, but please let her get fed up and put them in their places. They sound envious.

 

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: October 04 2015

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Rated: Most Ages
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[Reviews - 71]
Summary:

 

Another Tangie story celebrating the couple who inspired me to begin writing fanfic. 



Table of Contents
Categories: Daytime Television
Characters: Evangeline Williamson
Classification: Off Cannon
Genre: Family, Friendship, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Tangeline (One Life to Live)
Warnings: Un-betaed
Series: None
Chapters: 11
Completed:Yes
Word count: 25172
Read Count: 45708
Published: May 31 2015
Updated: December 22 2015


Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Pretty good. I like determined men.



Author's Response:

Yeah swirly_girl and we all know how "determined" Todd can be especially going after what he wants ;) Thanks for leaving a review!

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: July 22 2015

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Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 200]
Summary:

Nathaniel Hendricks lived alone in his lakehouse on Lake Michigan spending his days remebering the young son he tracgically lost and the wife who left him when he needed her the most. The only thing that kept him remotely happy was the lake he lived by boating and fishing. He already failed as a father and a husband so why would God give him another chance?

Eden Wilson spent most of her life running from abuse and now as a young adult she finds herself running from an obsessive abusive ex-boyfriend. Not wanting the child she's carrying to be in danger she spends most of her pregancy running until she tries to get in contact with her uncle for help. Eden finds herself with her uncle's friend a lonely handsome man Nathaniel who gives her shelter in a snowstorm. 

Little did either of them know how close the baby would bring them together or how much this little bundle of joy would help them learn about secound chances.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 15
Completed:No
Word count: 28561
Read Count: 37469
Published: June 16 2015
Updated: June 14 2016


Title: Chapter 9: CAST

Nathaniel picture does not come through.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: July 21 2015

Title: Chapter 10: FEBRUARY 10TH 1990

His ex wife has to be addressed. Her vindictiveness should not go addressed. Just got to come up when th something to put her in her place... in his past. She wants him alone and miserable, please make his and her ending sting his ex and her husband.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: July 22 2015

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[Reviews - 765]
Summary:

Sequel to "Love, God & Ultimatums"



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Comedy , Drama, Family, Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, BDSM, Dark Fic, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Original Characters, Racism, Rape, Strong Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 38
Completed:No
Word count: 227600
Read Count: 78672
Published: July 03 2015
Updated: May 09 2021


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - First Date Redux

Man, I know this is a romance, but at the end of this chapter I kept thinking, " Girl call it a wash, u guys r done." I hate how he goes off on her. See I'm such a fuck'em and drop'em. But she loves and is willing to hang in there... But she has got to stop letting her family get to her. Her needs to told how she feels. Dad can be handled as well as her sisters... All of them. Well good writing can't wait for chapter 15, but like everyone else, I will... lol.



Author's Response:

Lol.  That you will.  

Brandon has revealed a rather unpleasant side of himself and, unfortunately, aimed it at Diya.  But, like you said, she's not likely to just end it off that alone.  Nor is she likely to stop being affected by her family and what she fears they'll do.  As the story progresses, you might find her completely justified in that.

Thanks swirly_girl!

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: January 19 2016

Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 11]
Summary:

Torn between two lovers can never be easy... Especially when they're brothers.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Strong Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 1
Completed:No
Word count: 1595
Read Count: 817
Published: July 06 2015
Updated: July 06 2015


Title: Chapter 1: Chapter one

Girl, this sounds like trouble.... 

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: July 15 2016

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[Reviews - 470]
Summary:

While returning home to Chicago from a business trip Anika Wallace and Hunter Sterling IV find themselves the only surviors of a plane crash on a South Pacific island. There's no telling when they'll make it back home or if they ever will make it back home for that matter. One thing is for sure they're going to have to learn how to get along their survival is depending on it.



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: On hiatus indefinitely
Pairings: None
Warnings: Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 36
Completed:No
Word count: 54201
Read Count: 121651
Published: August 12 2015
Updated: March 02 2017


Title: Chapter 33: THE TRIP 2

I like how you added the back story of the other characters.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: June 27 2016

Title: Chapter 32: THE TRIP 1

Great chapter. I really like your writing style. If this is a repeat comment... Well, who gets tired of compliments. lol

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: June 04 2016

Title: Chapter 36: DAY 61

Thank you for that update, pretty good.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: March 04 2017

Title: Chapter 36: DAY 61

This is so good, too bad the updates are very much behind. But then so are mine, due to writer’s block... oh well.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed
Date: April 29 2019

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.