I will be seriously pissed off if he burns her lion. 

Aza needs to get a freaking grip.

I feel bad for Carla. She seems so sweet and awkward. 

Do you have a thing for Draco Malfoy because Aza looks an awfully lot like him, lol. (Draco from most Dramione fanfics, not the story...to pointy)

I don't really care for Vita. I do like that you showed the changed Aza is going through.

I can't give this chapter much of a review because it was hard to read.  The huge blocks of text make it diffifult to read and is bad on the eyes. Please work on the formatting, and seperate the text so that it's easier to identify who's speaking...much like in a novel. 

Welp, I'm done with this story. Not because I dislike it, but because I refuse to try to read it. The formatting of this story is ridiculous. It's not difficult to break up a large paragraphs. When you copy and past it a chapter, press preview, reread your work, press enter to seperate sentences to start a new paragraph, and once finished press sumbit or whatever.

I'm sorry if this comes off as harsh, but it's very incosiderate to post these huge paragraphs, with multiple character's speaking. Even if it's a long paragraph, there should only be one speaker per paragraph, just as there are in books. 

Aww, Poor Carla! :( 

Vita disgusts me. 

I enjoyed this chapter. 

Hmm, when did Vita decide that he loved Carla? I haven't read a single indication of that. It would be nice if there were more scenes of them getting to no each other, and perhaps a with only Vita and Carla. Again, Vita is something else. I wonder how Aza's going to feel when his father dies. 

The story has good movement, but it's a tad rushed. I don't think it should move slower, but I think you should spend a little more time on the character's bonding. I don't want them to fall in love over night, but the story is lacking a little depth. 

Also, her gown was a tad confusing as Aurora's gown doesn't hug her hips. I'm so over these snooty Aliens. I hope she puts them in their place soon.  

I'm glad Carla finally toook a chance, and Aza is opening up more. I hope that maybe if the three of them spend more time bonding they can help Vita overcome his madness. 

Thanks for updating! 

Are the names on your photos correct? Because you have Lanteri and Manteri, which just seem to close to correct, but I could be wrong. 

Thanks for updating. 

You need to watch your tenses because it gets very confusing. A good beta could you smooth out the kinks and make the story flow better.  

Poor Jack, I'm happy she's not a wilting flower. 

Yes, you did. Thank goodness it was a dream or I'd have been sorely disappointed. 

I like Owen. I wonder if there will be anything between him and Grant. 

I found it odd that Aiden called Lily short when she's 5'10 and he's only 6'3. 5'10 is six above average height for US females and average height for males, so I doubt Aiden would consider Lily short. 

Interesting. I'd love to know how they got together, and why Lexi is so into him. 

Thanks for sharing. 

Too fast. There should have been some build up to this chapter. You just dumped it in the story. You don't see the character's growth, but we're told she grew. *smh* Like, really. 

And I stand by Sasha needing therapy. She didn't just lose a parent at an early age; she tossed away like garbage, again and again with no knowledge of why. There's is nothing wrong with going to therapy. You act like it's a bad thing. I can't even buy Sasha's supposed growth because she wouldn't have just moved on from being tossed aside fot the umpteenth time overnight, especially without help. Oh, she could trick herself into believing that she's stonger, but it will not last. A few weeks of getting angry will not cure a lifetime of low self-esteem.

A character like Sasha, in particular, should be crafted with a mature, cautious hand...if you wont her to be believable. I apologize if this review is harsh, but I think the character deserves more. She could be really compelling character, but there's no real dephtp; it's all facile. 

Lastly, I know it's your story and you're free to write it how ever you wont it,so I'm not trying to tell you how to write your story. You don't want Sasha to have therapy, fine, but she needs strong support system. 

After reading some reviews, I'm adding to mine. 

I didn't get to Dimitri earlier. He's an ass. He was wrong for speaking to Sasha the way he did in the bath tub. He could have been a little less harsh with her; neverheless, I'm not angry at him for the way he spoke to her at the hospital. The man's siter is in the hospital because the woman he's daiting, who he personally asked not to get in his family affair, is directly responisible for the person he loved most in the world being in the hospital. Sasha shouldn't have called Nadia. It wasn't her place. She barely knows Dimitri. In what universe did she think it was okay to get involved with his family affairs? 

When you marry someone, you marry into that person family, well, they aren't married. They are barely in a relationship. Dimitri doesn't know how to be in a relationship, so he can't give Sasha or any other woman what she might need. Dimitri also needs to see a therapist. 

Also, why is no one else bothered by the fact that Sasha lied to Nadia? Nadia is a bitch, but that doesn't excuse Sasha lying to her in order to get her to the restaurant. And Sasha mainly did that because she thought that if Dimitri and Nadia made uo, then she and Dimitri would makeup. 

*smh* 

Almost every character in this story needs to see shrink. You have your work cut out for you in order to make their reunion viable. It will take a skilled writer to do it because you have two characters who aren't mentally ready to be in relationship: one expects too much too fast and the other gives little to none.