Ok I am loving this story..already!! I hate Nic but he is sexy as heck!!...Is he really a beast or will he give Sunshine the life she deserves...will he let her go to school as promised and will he let her go when the debt is paid...I know her family will be safe but what about her life!!
I have a feeling Sergei might find Sunshine a little too appealing and there in will lay another conflict...so many things to come..this is just the beginning but it is so very good!! and as much as it makes me cringe for a 30+ year old man to be sexual with a child of 18..Sunshine is much more mature than most 18yr old and she said herself ..she was not virgin.
I cannot wait for more sweetie..great job !!!!!
Reviewer: neneburge Signed
[Report This]Date: 05/12/09 10:50 pm
wow is all i can say dam that was hot he so evil and mean and controlling but dam he get the panties off a nun the way he talked and look lol. but something tells me he going to fall in love with her and she going to fall in love with him. thanks for the updated.
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 09:00 pm
wow i feel for her here she is about to go to school to be free and live her life and then bam father get in debt with all people the mob and now she has to bail her father out. this is going to be one intersting meeting and like the story thanks for the updated.
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 08:37 pm
nice pic of the cast.
Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 08:00 pm
That was Hot!! Sergie seems to have feelings for her too. Anatoly said do not mess with what is Nikolai. As hard as she may try not to, she will fall for Nikolai. I enjoyed it ,looking forward to the next update!!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 06:06 pm
She is goingto have to go in order to pay off her dad's debt. I wonder if dad will tell her not to. Enjoyed the first chapter!!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 05:17 pm
OMG! I am loving this story! Nikolai just might be bitten off more that he thought. It seems like he is starting to care for Sunshine already. With him wanting to keep her smile and thinking he needs to shave closer to keep her skin safe is really sweet in the "I'm a badass ganster killer" sort of way. You are doing great job and I am waiting for your next update.
Reviewer: Lovelybears Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 04:51 pm
Your story is very interesting . You have really developed your characters well. I even get a good feel for what Sunshine's mother was like. Great work.
Reviewer: Lovelybears Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 04:41 pm
Whoa! This was friggin' hot! I love bad boy stories. I'm worried that something might pop off between Sergei and Sunshine that might get them both killed, but I'm with you for the ride. Love what you've written so far. Please write more!!
Reviewer: Happy2bNappy Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 04:38 pm
Please update every day,It that good.
Reviewer: yummy954 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 02:30 pm
That was H O T!!! Oh Sunshine is so over her head and so is Nikolai. I can't wait to see how you play this out.
Reviewer: YHH Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 02:19 pm
I am disappointed in pops conduct. His action has lead to Sunny selling her body to save the family. I just hope one day, Sunny is able to get the normal life she craves.
Great story.
Reviewer: juno Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 01:22 pm
Great start!
Reviewer: yummy954 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 12:59 pm
Like the premise of the story. But do you suppose you could make Sunshine older. This guy is 31 and she is just 18. While she is legal;she is just barely legal -still in high school and it makes him a perv. While if she was a sophomore in college it would add more meat to your story and not simply be an old guy taking advantage of a young girl. She is still just a kid -no experience compared to him -and it makes him look like less of a man.
Reviewer: Willow950 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/12/09 11:57 am
This is a really good start. I look forward to the next update.
Reviewer: bookacholic247 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 10:15 am
WOW! This was a Great Update!
I had to laugh at Segei almost breaking his neck in his attempt to avoid touching Sunshine. He's a cutie pie. He is so close in age to Sunshine...will they become good friends...or more?
Nikolai is obviously a man to be feared and tough; look how he threw out Darla. Will she try to get back at Sunshine for Nikolai kicking her out?
Nikolai is used to getting what he wants. He says he will not break her, even though he and she both know that he could very easily. Right now he wants Sunshine. Will his "want" turn into love, one day. Sunshine did not seem that opposed to the "kiss." I wonder if she resistance will turn into passion for Nikolai. He is not holding anything back. By the way, the kissing scene at the end was HOT!!!!!!!!!!
Maybe Sunshine's dad will get his act together so she won't have to stay with Nikolai too long. He better hurry. I think if he doesn't, Nikolai will never let her go. But if her father is not getting much money from his plumbing business, how is going to support him and his son without going to the mob again? Although, I guess Sunshine could pawn her new bracelet.
I REALLY like this story! I can hardly wait for the Update.
Nyeesha
Reviewer: Nyeesha Signed
[Report This]Date: 05/12/09 08:38 am
Hmmm,...I like your introduction. Sunshine is a fighter. Her father is just plain lost. Nikolai is tough as nails; even the Russians in power are afraid of him. Segei is cute and is too nice to beat up people. AndAnatoly,...he's a real tough guy.
You really got me hooked on this story! How will the Russian treat her...will he handle her too roughly or will he respect her? Looking forward to the next Update....
Nyeesha
Reviewer: Nyeesha Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 08:23 am
Hey Onimosity,
I like the images of your characters. And I am just about to read your story.
Nyeesha
Reviewer: Nyeesha Signed [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 08:16 am
OMG, THIS IS A GREAT STORY. HATED FOR THE CHAPTER TO END. CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT UPDATE.
Reviewer: Raven Anonymous [Report This]Date: 05/12/09 07:54 am