Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Love how this is written: fast pace with a rhythm of its own and love the character of Harry, real earthy. Love how Harry handled those wannabe rapists of Evangeline, also the fighting he did was believable, logical that a very experienced gangster such as himself, definitely could take them both down, as so wonderfully described.
This is some really good writing; descriptive, revealing REAL people and very interesting persons. I've glimpsed several stories on this site and found very few that have this kind of creative, exciting and highly skilled writing.
LOL, Harry did a rush job on making his room look decent the way I sometimes have to do for unexpected company! Yeah!...,made me smile.
The dress Harry bought Eva is beautiful and in good taste. This story takes place in 1930's not too distant since Civil War ended. Raven, I''m glad you have realistically included the racism for this very violent racist era instead of white washing it.
The sex is HOT! but I'm real glad it doesn't happen between Harry and Eva during their initial getting acquainted, that would make it too much like "jungle fever"; by happening later it was two real individuals having a genuine interest in each other.
And Damn! The sex is HOT throughout this chapter! But Harry made love to Evangeline not just fucking; great lover and wonderful man-muscle he's got. I also loved the Billy Holiday songs Eva sings and the gangster action.
This is a long comment but, just love this chapter so much and there's so much life in it. Really super great writing Raven!
Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed
Date: 12/01/11