Freda needs to take a long walk off a short pier and let our girl live! Then the added emotional manipulation bringing up Yolanas mom to guilt her into compliance, so annoying! It takes talent to write a character so genuinely unlikeable in a story that's so good, thanks for the update!

This story is equally heartwarming and heartbreaking! Fantatic writing and character development. You do a great job at creating scenes as well. It is always a huge treat when you update this story!!!

Hmmm....see, its those little intangibles in the beginning when something gets started that are the trickiest. It may only have been a week, but there's something there; and thats why Nathan coudn't look at Yolana in the truck and felt bad all day about it. No, they don't owe each other anything at this point, but kinda, still. And it being her "friend" didn't help matters any. He really didn't have to do that. And trying to cheese it up and act like everything was cool was a turn off. Like bro, don't try to handle her!

Yolana, however, pleasantly surprised me because she handled it well. I'd still keep all that in mind dealing with the both of them from now on. Having said that, she did ask Yolana first. It just wasn't cool of either of them. 

Nice update!

Nathan and Yolo are just too cute for words, and I love that he so wanted to make her smile and not be mad at him for having that THOT Candance being in the car with them

As for his one nighter( and that better be the only one) the next time that Nathan is feeling aroused, have him visit Ms. Palm and her 5 daughters(aka his hand) and I already don't like Candance, she's not a friend to Yolo at all,and then what to brag about the fact she spreads easier than peanut butter, whatever.

And Freda better let Yolo keep those flowers.

I don't know how Yolana can live like that 😕 always in constant fear of her aunts reaction. Seems to me like her aunt needs Yolana around to make herself feel important. Nice update

Author's Response:

There are so many people out there in similar situations and its scary to see other people treat their love ones that way.

This chapter was almost unbearably adorable! I'm loving Nathan and Yolana's budding relationship, great update!

Explore his options !? Oh no!!

Ok, that scene with Conner was hilarious!! Poor kid!

So, its a funky position to be in when you're trying to get to know someone yourself to then have your friend scope him out for herself. Even worse for her ask if you have eyes on him and you cant say either way yet, but hands off anyway. Yeah, that sucks!

Its really coming along! Great chapter!

Nice

Author's Response:

Thanks!

I'm interested in more. Good job!

This story is very very good and has got my full attention. I also grew up in a religious, strict family so I see alot of myself in Yolana. Keep going, your writing is wonderful. I am looking forward to each new chapter <3 

Your writing is very good.  Your story is picking up momentum.   I hope you will keep posting.

At first I was confused as to what the point of the story was. This second chapter cleared that up. It's good writing I was envisioning everything in my head. Excited for the next chapter!!