I have to say that I for one don't agree with what some of the different reviewers are saying concerning the age gap. For this simple reason, one the author clearly states that she knows that the lead characters have a bit of an age gap, but there will be nothing sexual or romantic happening between Mina and Lucas until Mina becomes legal in other words reaches the age of 18. So for any one who still goes on about this and makes something that should't be a problem into a big issue then this clearly isn't the story for you, and could you please leave as you are most definately ruining it for the rest of the class. Thank you.
Also this is a wonderful start to a story that I am sure I will be enjoying with great pleasure, so thank you for letting us come into your world, and see what you see.
Reviewer: onyxfaerie57 Signed
[Report This]Date: August 18 2011 07:04 am
That was HOT!!!!!! I luv it!!!!!
Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 06:20 am
I READ MOTHER GOOSE REPLY & I DONLT AGREE THIS SITE IS 4 17YR OLDS & UP & IF U RATED RITE U R NOT RESPONSIBLE 4 WHOEVER UNDERAGE THAT READ W/THAT B N SAID WHOEVER DON'T LIKE THE CONTENT DON'T READ DON'T COME AGAINST A GREAT WRITER WHO IS HUNIN HER CRAFT B/C I DON'T WANT HER DISCOURAGED OVER SOME1 WHO CAN'T APPRECIATE THE CRAFT PERSONALLY I THOUGHT THAT WAS HOT W/JUST THE SEXUAL TENTION JUST CAN IMAGINE WHEN THEY DO COME 2GETHER FIRE WORKS KEEP DOIN UR THANG WEED OUT THE NEGATIVE BAGGAGE & CONCENTRATE ON THE POSITIVE WAITIN 4 MORE
Reviewer: kvgurl Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 06:12 am
I'm loving this story! Lucas is intense!
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 05:46 am
You certainly managed to sustainthe sexual tension and establish character chemistry. Good read, thanks for updating. Hope to contine reading soon.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 05:25 am
I liked it :-) I wonder how Christina is going to react to this development...
Reviewer: dcphoenix1 Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 05:13 am
It would be nice to read a story where the woman dictates her own destiny and isn't reduced to property or a sexual toy for a man. I know that now with Chapter Two she's 18+, but the thoughts he had about her at 15, are still disturbing and this relationship is dangerous beyond words.
I know many will say it's fiction, however there are many people on this site, reading and writing who are not of age and don't understand what it means to be in a healthy relationship. I caution you on glamorizing this type of relationship...please be careful and consider your audience...
Reviewer: Mother Goose Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 04:14 am
Ummm...you need to hurry up and get to updating. This is going to be one of my favs. I see it already. Thanks for sharing!
Reviewer: Elizablu Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 03:30 am
the story is great so far. also when the time is right for the sex/lovemaking scenes arrive it will be glorious.
Reviewer: sandra Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 03:13 am
Congratulations on posting your first story. I really like what I'm seeing so far. Before I read a new story If it already has some reveiws, I check out the reveiws first. So I have read the updates you have up so far...now I will have my 2 cents to say .lol...I would think that as you being the author of this piece of fine work, that you already know how its gonna play out...even with the Taboo subject of a grown-ass man having grown-ass feelings for an underage girl. The two main players in this tale haven't had sex...but they can't help how they feel about each other whether it be emotional or physical and even if its wrong or right. Did the age differance take me surprise...yeah, but only for a second. Luke knows that it's wrong about how he is feeling for this young girl but he can't help it. I love that you show how he feel about this ...actually I really love this story!! When I was reading Luke's & Mina's POV, I forgot that the girl was young as hell...lol. Truthfully I think you know what to post and what not to post. And I know that are people out there that are hesitant about this subject matter, but this shit happens everyday, all over the world...and as long as he waits till she is legal (18 yrs) then go head and do you. I really don't know about any comparisons to Bondage in Bloom cause I haven't read it. But with all of the great stories on this site, trust and believe that you can compare someone's work to another...Shit this is a long ass reveiw!! It will probably the last long ass one, too. I just wanted to say my piece and I loved that you decided to take a chance on this. KUDOS, Chica!! Keep it going and don't let others steal your joy!! DEUCES!
Reviewer: Elizablu Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 03:11 am
Me likey. More please.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 02:49 am
Nice. Keep it up, girl. You cannot see Mina and Luke's pictures.
Reviewer: LOVE IT Anonymous
[Report This]Date: August 18 2011 02:42 am
more ...more.... more..... more......more..... more ....more.....I think you get the point...and just to be sure....more .......more .....more .....more.... more...............did i remember to say more????
Reviewer: chelle Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:55 am
Supreb, you rock. Need a update.
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:54 am
Okay so the much anticipated chapter 3 is up. I can't wait to into the other brothers so people can see how they fit into the story. We'll be going back and forth through time a bit but it will certainly explain how everyone got to where they are at the party. I hope this chapter distances itself in peoples minds from Bondage. Hope to put the pictures up soon and maybe another chapter tonight.
Reviewer: crocuslady Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:52 am
great! ...... love the fact that you are respecting the age difference and waiting for mina to come of age....i hope that will be happening soon because i love this story....please keep it coming...and keep it coming soon and often.......ignore the nay sayers because you already addressed the issue of age and waiting....he moved to the guess house......it think that is sufficient.........once again keep it coming
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:37 am
Good concept - I'm glad I decided to read further - sounds interesting. I can't wait to see where you take these characters and this story. BTW - welcome to the Chamber!
Reviewer: katie Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:34 am
Well, you should have nothing to worry about. This is a solid start. You made you characters intriguing and I am interested in seeing what happens next. I am interested in finding out what made Mina instantly intriguing to Luke. Is there some thing about what happend in the past that captured his attention? There should be so hook for why a 24 yr old would be interested in a 15 year old. Something beyond sex, maybe a shared interest, hobby or experience.
Reviewer: Shereads48 Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:29 am
working on your transition and expanding some of your scenes to reflect your concept will improve your story, you have a great idea maybe an outline will help you organize it. looking forward to reading more
Reviewer: Anya_Iris Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 01:04 am
Wow, this is interesting :) Great beginning. Can't wait to read more. I haven't read the other story some of the reviewers are comparing it to so I can't speak on it if this is similar to it, but that's bound to happen. All stories are cliches it just depends on the concept and how you write it so it's all good in my book :) PS. as long as there isn't any sexual contact going on than you don't have to immediately bump her age to 18 until the apropriate time and the most that can happen is the story will get taken down.
Reviewer: JLeshay Signed [Report This]Date: August 18 2011 12:23 am
I like the story so far. I don't think it really matters that it seems similar to another story that was previously posted. Many romance stories have similarities. Rich guy/poor girl, unrequited love, we hated each other before we realized we really loved each, invisible person/most popular, I'm in love with my bestfriend, may/december love. I think an author's creativity is what matters. The spin is what make the story the story. I can't wait to see how Crocuslady spins this one!
Reviewer: MsJ Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 17 2011 11:56 pm
Good golly miss molly, this is a great start. Please update soon
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: August 17 2011 11:50 pm
Oh I love it. I so looking forward to your next update.
Reviewer: pokerdiva01 Signed [Report This]Date: August 17 2011 11:44 pm
Love this story. It does sort of remind me of Bondage in Bloom, but I know you have your own spin, which is excellent. Just promise us, you will not take it down. I want to read this story to the end. I want it to have 50 chapters, lol. Oh, your pictures are not showing. You may have to repost them.
Can't wait for more!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: August 17 2011 11:34 pm
This story is incredibly similar to a story that was posted and removed, Bondage in Bloom.
That story also had an orphaned ward and an obsessive caretaker. Are you familar with that story?
Reviewer: Lacey Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 17 2011 11:09 pm