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Title: Coming Home

I enjoyed it, but couldn't shake the association with Lt. Dan from Forrest Gump. :-D

 

 

you might need a beta-reader to help iron out spelling and other errors that spellcheck won't catch (like "steer" instead of "stare").

is it just my imagination, that you skipped directly over describing the really tense scenes: the fight when Dan tells her that he's joining the Army; her months of not hearing from him; the pain of him recovering and going through rehab maybe with only her face in his mind to motivate.

Each of those would make a great chapter in itself, or as flashback. Don't rush yourself... Or your story. It's worth it! 

 

 

 Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 08:12 am
Title: Coming Home

Wow this is so beautiful



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Thank you!

 Reviewer: Keyajackson Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2014 07:38 pm
Title: Coming Home

Beautiful story



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Thank you!

 Reviewer: xiaomei21 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2012 09:38 am
Title: Cast

I liked the story however it could use some major editing. Also Daniel is not a quadraplegic if he has the use of his arms, he would classified as a paraplegic meaning he has no use of his legs. Other than that it was a good story!



Author's Response:

Thanks, I will  get to editing.. 

 Reviewer: BossLady Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 12 2012 09:41 pm
Title: Coming Home

Thanks for a great read.



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Thank youuu!

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 11 2012 01:13 pm
Title: Cast

Good looking cast.  Thanks



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Thanks.

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 11 2012 01:06 pm
Title: Cast

a really nice story! at first i was mad at Daniel for not telling Tracy but i hear him and undetstand why he did it - and he more made up at the end with that sexiness and confidence, lol! thanks for the one-shot!!



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Thank you much! 

 Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11 2012 09:20 am
Title: Coming Home

This was really good.  I think he was wrong for keeping the info. from her, but I am sure he will try to make it up to her.  LOL.  Nice chapter and incredibly hot!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you Brenda!

 Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10 2012 12:00 pm
Title: Coming Home

Loving it... Wow



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Thank you much!

 Reviewer: keikei2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2012 06:28 am
Title: Coming Home

That was freaking hot!!!  Loving the cast, the men were smoking!!!!!



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Thank you pmgayles :) 

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2012 04:35 am
Title: Coming Home

I liked it!



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Thank you Elizablu!

 Reviewer: Elizablu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2012 03:39 am
Title: Coming Home

I like the story.  What I like best is that Daniel came home whole even though he was not physically fit.  He made sure that he came back ready to show his wife that he was the same man with a few changes.  I hope that make sense.



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lol yes it did. Glad you liked it. Thank you!

 Reviewer: Cherry Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 10 2012 03:29 am


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