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Title: Two -The Invasion

What kind of disgust runs through this woman's veins. Why does she treat Nichole with such disdain. She can't live without aman looking ather and if they don't she attacks them! That bitch is crazy. I want MORE interaction with Richard and NIchole.!!!! Carmen will hate it but I won't. EXCELLENT 

 Reviewer: Spiderbite Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 10:51 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

This Carmen woman is a stank bitch! I can smell her from here! I do not like her AT ALL! The way she treats her family and the way she thinks and acts makes me want to slap her!!! AWESOME JOB

 Reviewer: Spiderbite Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 10:11 pm
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

I like the opening picture black and white and a beautiful Lotus flower. I like the cast too

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Date: September 15 2012 09:55 pm
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

I think Carmen need to be put down like a dog cause you have to be seriously messed up to get someone to attack you sister. I hope Richard finds out she was behind it soon.

I love how Josef knock her sown hard when she was hitting on him and trying to get him to cheat. I am wondering if it is her mother that made that call to Josef?

I love how Richard is going to be staying with Nichole in her house now . I think Nichole should say yes to dating Richard. They can take things slow if she wants but I don't know how much longer she will be able to resist.

 Reviewer: lovinn Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 07:36 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Carmen... leaves me speechless in her depravity. Any hold on reality is nonexistant for this trick. I really hope that the folks that she's done wrong in the past have a hand in her downfall. she's acting like Boo-Boo the Fool. Even her mother is fed up with her *finally* and is taken action against her. Carmen is a "who dun it" in the making.

 Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 03:46 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Just the fact that you have one sister that wanted the other sister to be raped for a sick reason is really sick. There are bad seeds in this world and Carmen is one of them.

However, my FAVORITE line out of this chapter that had me bawling was when Carmen asked Josef "If I walk around this what will I get?" Josef: "Thrown Out!" LMAO That's my dude right there. I cracked up laughing. Now no one wants Carmen and her nasty butt.

And Nicole, she better take Richard or I will. Don't let true love pass you by. Love their interaction in the kitchen and I love how Richard protected Nicole during that incident. He went rambo on that dude.

Can't wait for another update! Good job!

 Reviewer: luvrayne Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 11:16 pm
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Well good for Richard he laid on the line. Nichole better date him after all he is her knight in shining armour! Carmen thinks all men want her but she is so wrong. Josef let her know she isn't worth anything to him. I'm glad Danny's nose got broken. What an idiot doing anything for Carmen. Great chapter!!!!!

 Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 10:50 pm
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

This heifer named Carmen will get exactly what she needs when Richard and Nichole fall in love. She will cease to be. The only way that she will be known is through her evil and inhuman deeds that she does. She is creepy and I feel that her time is almost up; but with all psychopaths they sense when things are not going thier way and change their tactics. I LOVE THIS STORY!UPDATE

 Reviewer: Water Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 07:27 pm
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

love it, richard is a life safer and i'm glad that he asked her out, i wonder if carmen's mother warned josef about her if it wasn't her i wonder who it was....great update, can't wait to read more 

 Reviewer: sandycheecks Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 08:34 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Burned! Twice! Take that Carmen.....So happy Richard and Nichole are getting closer.

 Reviewer: Nicci Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 07:15 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Wow. Woooooooooow. Setting up her sister to be raped? Nuh-uh. I've said this before, but Carmen needs to be erased. Preferably by the women whose marriages she helped wrecked.

 Reviewer: Leo the Yardie Chick Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 07:06 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Awesome update! Carmen, it's over, no one wants you! Loved how Richard handled her. It's absolutely unbelievable she would set her sister up to be raped. I'm not saying she should die a slow death at the end, wait a minute yes I am. She should not be allowed to live.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 05:52 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

great upate - carmen is really scary crazy

 Reviewer: katie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 05:37 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Thanks for a great update. How sad that Carmen got one of her crazy men to RAPE her sister all because she doesn't understand the word NO...I DON'T WANT YOU.

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 05:35 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

need more update soon

 Reviewer: lady tee Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 05:01 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Carmen is truly a disgusting waste of space! I cant believe this woman, I really cant. The absolute glee she displayed at the prospect of this man she hired to rape and hurt her sister was scary. Someone not wanting her is just not an option in her world, is it? Ugh!!

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 04:48 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

I love your stories.  Great update!

 Reviewer: ShelbyD Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 03:48 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Richard is the man and plus he has Carmen's number.  The based part is that her mother called to warn Josef Manteri about Carmen.    I can't wait for Carmen to pay the ultimate price maybe with her life and in jail.  Just as long as she gets handled.  Richard you are the man!!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 03:32 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

No!  Please update soon, the story is getting really good

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 02:45 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

I am loving this story!!! Thanks for the update hope to see another one soon!!!!!

 Reviewer: Tempestsunshine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 02:28 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

I hate Carmen with a passion and she is to even real! That bitch is working my killing hand like no other bitch before! I hate her M...... F........ GUTS!

I LOVE Richard and Nichole!!!! Once he finds out that Carmen sent that man to Nichole's house IT'S ON!

its just like Josef said YOU'VE BEEN MADE!!!

THIS STORY IS AMAZING I LOVE IT!!!!

 Reviewer: Tyler and Fran Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 02:20 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Good story but I think Carmen is vain and crazy! All that plotting and nastiness is going to come back to haunt her! I don't want Nichole to be hurt again!

 Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 09 2012 05:36 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

For Carmen to place her anger against her grandmother on Nichole is CRAZY!!!! She  thinks that everyone should love her because she is thier blood and it should be unconditional. I think that they do love her but not what she does to women and other families.

Her desire to hurt Nichole makes me fearful that she will go as far as murder. She has that type of mindset. She truly is PSHYCO! I love this story and the fact the the main character is the evil one. You write beautifully. All your characters have such substance. Keep going!!!!!!

 Reviewer: Creepy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 27 2012 06:12 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Thanks for the update. When will this woman fell because she is crazy.

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 09:53 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Thanks for the update. When will this woman fall because she is crazy.

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 09:52 pm


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