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Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

I hope Brent lives.  I was a bit surprised that Brent has Colin's number but Colin doesn't know Brent. Anyway, it would be great if they were friends and it seemed to me that Colin knew enough to suspect Carmen's subterfuge with the "twin" comment.    I'm sure Colin knows that Carmen is selfish enough that he sincerely doubts that she cares enough about said sister to be hurt by anything by her.  I hope both Colin and Brent get girls.  Colin should hook up with a Police Officer lady.  Brent maybe hooks up with Josef Manteri's wifes cousin. I am totally randomly throwing that out there since these guys sound gorgeous.   I can't wait until you bring in Josef Manteri...I saw the pick of his wife...she's gonna go Beyonce in Obsessed on Carmen.  Not to mention that I think Josef's wife probably keeps him plenty happy.   This is gonna be brilliant.   I think Roman lost his chance...Richard seems the most untainted by Carmen and the only guy that has NEVER in any way touched Carmen (shocker).   I think Roman needs a girl too, but accept that Nichole has moved on. Having sex with Carmen will always be a black mark against him for Nichole.   But he needs a nice girl to keep him happy.   And someone who can stand up to Carmen.    

 

By the way...I had the strangest thought that Carmen killed Lillian.  I don't know why that keeps crossing my mind. I think it's the amount of hate that Carmen exudes regularly and how she is willing to have Nichole killed...I figured she probably had other people killed if she didn't do it herself.  Keep it coming, great read.

 Reviewer: vaberella Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 06:34 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

You are absolutely right that damn Carmen is a psychopath, I don’t think she has any redeeming quality. Nichole needs to be on guard at all times around her, at least until they can put her ass in a mental institution. Great update by the way I will be on the lookout for the next one :) :) :)

 Reviewer: Tempestsunshine Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 05:29 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Wow that heifer is truly cuckoo for cocoa puffs. She seriously needs a stray-jacket and padded cell. I can't wait for it all to come crashing down on her.

 Reviewer: Nicci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 04:17 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

I really like this story because it is so different. We are actually in the mind of the enemey and you make great transitions! I really want Richard and Nichole to come out on top! Fingers cross!!

 Reviewer: Anon Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 02:58 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

That Carmen is one vile psycho cow! Great update!

 Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 02:34 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

This is a really good story, all the character fit into the right places and the story flows nicely.

 

Update soon

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 02:32 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

carmen is really crazy she's getting back at her grandma by trying to ruin her sisters life, i hope her plan fails, nichole and richard are startiing to get close and i hope that roman's visit doesn't have a big impact on how nichole feels for richard 

 Reviewer: sandycheecks Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 01:11 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Holy crap, this woman is wacked all the way out! I cant even believe what she is saying and doing to people. There has to be some justice and have this lunatic taken down before she really gets to Nichole. I'm also hoping Nichole gets wise to her and has something good for her. And Richard needs to be at the ready because he knows firsthand what she's like.

 

This is like a soap! 

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 12:54 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

Please kill Carmen, I truly hate her and I want all of her plains to fail.  Nichole deserves some happiness.  This is incredible!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 11:38 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Carmen's psychosis has been untreated for far too long.  Now it's too late for the parents to have her committed as she is now a grown crazy ass woman.  How has Carmen gotten away with irratic behavior?  Nichole just needs to beat her down one good time and she would leave her alone.  Roman is fine, too bad is character was so stupid.

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 11:07 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Carmen needs to be taken out. Right. Now.

 Reviewer: Leo the Yardie Chick Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 09:58 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Commit her to a mental institution now. She has lost it. Richard is not going to leave her sister, if anything he will be by her side through all of this. What sane person would tell someone to rape her sister?

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 08:33 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Wow, this is an amazing story.

It really was the glimpse into the mind of a psychopath. Of somebody who has no insight into the wrongness of their actions and who think that because it benefits them then it must be right even if innocent people get hurt along the way.

 

Great update. Can't wait for the next one.

 Reviewer: valis202 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 08:25 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

Wow she must really hate her sister to go to such extrems as this.... that is just evil

please uodate soon

 Reviewer: tisha1234 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 08:11 pm
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

That girl is gone!!!!!!! She's got plans within plans. All of them are aimed to hurt Nichole. However she is not who Carmen blames for her reason for acting as she does. She blames her grandmother because she chose Nicjole over her. She is once again outing out her anger by hurting that person.   Lillian loves Nichole so Nichole is who she will hurt. She is crazy. I hate her. I can't believe that she would do all of this because she felt that slighted by Lillian who saw that something was wrong with her. I don't think she would ever seek help. I think the only way to help her is death or a beats own so severe she can't walk again. She is just TERRIBLE

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!

 Reviewer: Creepy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 07:42 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

Awesome job writing the characters! And Carmen is vile person, I so dislike her!

 Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 19 2012 09:56 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

this is a really good story but is there another reason why carmen is the way she is, like why does she really hate her sister and want to see her miserable.....can't wait to read more 

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 19 2012 09:01 am
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

Go Richard go! I am so glad, so glad that neither Richard nor Nichole fell for stank ho's barbs. I am so happy that Richard knows why she is acting bipolar LOL. I love that he told her straight up what's what.  I want the war that's coming. I lov e the plan that Richard has going twitch Nichole. I love thier cat and mouse conversation. I can't wait for her to open up more now that she knows there is a man that does not want her sister and he is in her house. Get to writing PLESASE I LOVE THIS STORY

 Reviewer: AntiVenom Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 04:19 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

Stank ho bitch is so trifling. I hate that ho. You do her so well LOL! I can't believe what she did and does to her sister! My sisters would never do that! She is truly EVIL. There is nothing redeeming about her. She needs to suffer and I hope that Richard and Nichole's budding relationship does just that. I love Richard. I love his straight forward ness towards Carmen. I also love the fact that he does not want him and she wants him. Bring on the dirty

 Reviewer: AntiVenom Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 03:57 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

I shall refer to Carmen as stank ho bitch whenever I read this. I hate her. You have done an excellent job with that. I want her sorry ass broken. Did I mention that I hate her. Why do these people always want the ones that they can't have. I can't wait for the jealousy and bad intentions to start. Great job

 Reviewer: AntiVenom Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 03:42 pm
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

I like, I like

 Reviewer: AntiVenom Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 03:33 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

I truly love this story, please continue and update soon.

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 10:45 am
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

Loved the update. Carmen needs a ife lesson and all her scheming needs to bite her in the butt. She's a miserable soul to be so vindictive to her sister.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 07:09 am
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

My concern is that that crazy ho might cause Nichole to be physically hurt. Too bad Cray-Cray doesn't seem to realize that there's something in the world called Karma and her azz is storing up one hell of a payday.

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Date: August 16 2012 05:15 am
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

I'm glad Richard and Nicole aren't letting Carmen get to them. I know its eating her alive knowing that things aren't going her way. Can't wait to see what happens next.

 Reviewer: helloWORLD Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 04:18 am


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