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Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

Can someone please KILL that *B*. She makes my teeth hurt the psycho HO. I love the fact that Richard put her in her place but she needs a beat down like yesterday. I hope that Nichole stays strong against the evil that is her sister. Their grandmother had the right idea in giving that psycho a bus ticket out of town. I hope their mother Audrey stays firm against evil and continues to help Nichole. Thanks for a great update.

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 02:19 am
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

It was a good chapter. Carmen is evil, how can she do so many awful things to her sister and not feel any remorse about them. Cracked up at what grandmom gave Carmen for graduation. I hope Roman does not fall for her tricks.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2012 12:56 am
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

I am loving this story. I can't wait to sear Nicole come out her shell.

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Date: August 15 2012 11:25 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

I have 5 sisters and none of them is like Carmen,  she's crazy

 Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2012 10:56 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

I love how Richard shut that Bitch Carmen down quick when she tried her shit. I mean any guy that believed what Carmen said and never asked Nichole if it was true, derserve Carmen and not Nichole. I glad to see that Nichole saw how angry Richard was at Carmen and how he didn't want her. The progression of their relationship is going really good and I hope Carmen fail at every turn to tear them apart cause that Ho needs a lesson.

 Reviewer: lovinn Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 15 2012 10:23 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

OMG I love Nichole and Richard. I love Richard's plan to see if she is interested in his new way of thinking. I love their interaction. Nichole DESERVES some love GIVE IT TO HER!!! I LOVE that Richard told the ho that she ain't getting his you know what in you know where LOL. Carmen cried. SO!!!! I wished he pushed her downthe stairs. I hope that Roman makes her cry too! I lvoe this story!!!!

 Reviewer: OrangePeelings Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2012 09:37 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

Yeah I love Ricard. I love the interaction between Nichole and said Richard. I love that he told slutty Carmen what is and what ain't going to happen LOL!!!! I loved that

Carmen is a first class low class BITCH!! She will go to any lengths ANY LENGTHS! to hurt her sister. MORE THIS IS AWESOME!!!!!

 Reviewer: Hanna Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2012 09:21 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

I hope Nichole eventually falls for Richard.  I am truly liking his devotion to her and her reluctance towards him.  They look like an interesting couple.  When she does fall, it would be hard and I think she would be as protective of him as he is of her.  I know Richard is a jerk, but I like the fact that you are building it up where Nichole is redeeming him.  Or I hope he redeems himself for her.  I hope you write more.  Richard and Nichole are cool beans!

 Reviewer: vaberella Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 09 2012 03:49 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

Are the names on your photos correct? Because you have Lanteri and Manteri, which just seem to close to correct, but I could be wrong. 



Author's Response:

I don't know why I made the names similar. I just changed Richard's last name so i would stop getting them mixed up. Thank you for reading. Forks and Knives

 Reviewer: Cholyn Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 07:02 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

Carmen is seriously certifiable. She needs some help.....I get the feeling its all going to backfire on her though. Richard in no way, shape or form wants her. Nichole's gonna fall for him and then Richard is going to kick Carmen to the curb for her! More soon please!

 Reviewer: Nicci Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 06:55 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

Wow, Carmen is sooo evil. I hope she gets what's coming to her and her plans for Nichole backfires on her.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 06:19 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

Hard to believe Carmen & Nichole have the same parents.  Excellent update.  Carmen is CRAZY, I wonder how far she will go.  I do know that she is no match for Richard.  Looking forward to more, lovin' it!

 Reviewer: idriveavitz Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 04:32 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

Like a malignant tumour, Carmen needs to be excised. Completely. Pure poison, that one. I don't even want her to be redeemed, that's how much I despise her. Ringside seat at her karmic beatdown? Just tell me when, where, what time, and which snacks to bring.

 Reviewer: Leo the Yardie Chick Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 04:07 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

I love this story, please update soon. I love the characters even though I think Nichole is stronger that carmens knows.

 

Great Job

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 03:22 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

Carmen needs to be out down because she us a rabid animal. I can't stand her trifiling behind. I like Richard. He seems to really like Nichole. I hope her mother plans work to get Richard and Nichole together. I think that Carmen is going to get her behind beat by Nichole again or Richard is going to set her up for a big fall. Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 03:00 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

OMG - Carmen is a psycho!! Love the story - please continue to update regularly!

 Reviewer: katie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 02:42 am
Title: Two -The Invasion

As long Richard is working with Carmen he will never stand a chance with Nichole.  Carmen Richard does not want you he wants a woman of substance like your sister Nichole.  Why is Carmen so psycho?  Why is Audrey forcing interaction between her daughters?  Nichole just needs to let loose on Carmen so that she can feel better, ain't nothing gonna touch Carmen but death.

Carmen needs to be beaten, like she stole Nichole's last dollar!  Thank you for such a speedy update.

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2012 02:28 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

Oh my god carmen is crazy! She wants to get rid of her sister!!! Lol love this so far can't wait to see how this turns out! Richard is hot, oooo whats gona happen next can't wait to find out please update soon, eagerly waiting for more he he xx

 Reviewer: Bubblegum7 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 11:30 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

Carmen is cuckoo. What happened to make her have so much angst with Nichole? The competiation and insecurity was there in high school so it had to have happened before? Loved the update and the fact that now is going to be coming to Nichole's house, whethere she wants it or not. She needs to put up some barbwire to keep her skank sister out. I can't wait for the punishment that Colin is going to dish out b/c he already said he isn't thru.

Thanks for replying on my last comment. It wasn't you, I think the hotness of the cast pictures clouded my brain and I got confuddled :D

 Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:57 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

I wonder if Carmen will try and solicit the help of this Wisconsin Rapist?? I really want Nich to lighten up, but I guess she and Richard would have to communicate more huh? Carmen is starting to make me itch. 

 Reviewer: idiotendenial Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:55 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

Carmen wants all the men. I love how she says that she does not dwell on the past. She can't stop thinking about how Roman one of highschool road dogs picked her ordinary sister over her. That just eats at her and drives her to do what she is doing now. The only difference is that Richard is immune to her. I love htat Audrey knows that and is working undercover to get her Nichole some loving from a strong and capable man.

I love the scene between he and Nichole. They deserve to be together but I know that Carmen ain't going to allow that becuase she thinks that Richard is Roman. However, she is finding out that he is his own man.

Any woman that would use underhanded methods on their own sister or anybody use needs a beat down. Carmen is due for more. She is  bitch and you write her so well . (not that I am saying you got bitch trndencies down but I'm saying you write bitch tendencies verl well)

Is Victoris Khale married to Manteri that would be STELLAR!!

PLEASE CONTINUE

THIS UPDATE WAS EXCELLENT

 Reviewer: OrangePeelings Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:50 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

Carmen is one sick puppy. She is in love with Richard, but doesn't want to acknowledge it. How is he going to know, if she does not open up to him. It looks like at one time he did care for her, but she continually ignored him for the rich and fmous. What's a man to do but move on, Nichole, perfect choice. I understand it. it was not about Josef and Nichole, but Nicole and Richard.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:50 pm
Title: Two -The Invasion

Wow,  what the heck is Carmen's problem? Can't wait for the next update

 Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:36 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

This is not confusing at all, I get it.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:29 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Carmen is a stank ho bitch! How coudl any family pu up with her. I feel so bad for Nichole because Carmen is sooooo jealous of her because Richard wnats her. She is the type of woman that thinks all men should want her. The fact that Richard does not drives her to do stupid things. NEXT chapter. GREAT START

 Reviewer: OrangePeelings Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:24 pm


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