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Title: Just Ordinary Cast

I love this cast. Not a weak picture in the bunch

 Reviewer: OrangePeelings Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 10:06 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Okay, Mama can't drive or mail them keys to Carmen. I love my mama, but there are some things she can not get me to do. Carmen is so unpleasant to Nichole and yet she wants her to bring her keys to her. Carmen is a person that only a mother can love and tolerate to a point. I am eager to read the next chapter. I can't wait to read what Mrs. Manteri or Mr. Colin do to Carmen. This girl is beyond morals and I can't think of any word except Evil. I know there's an excuse of why Carmen is like this and the way she is acting 95 percent of me do not care what the reason is. I eagerly await the next chapter.

 Reviewer: Leigh Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 04:24 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Interesting start. Can't wait to read more.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 07:32 am
Title: One - Target sighted

Very interest. I like it. Carmen's days are definitely numbered. She's gonna mess with the wrong one soon. Can't wait to see some Nichole & Richard interaction. More soon please!

 Reviewer: Nicci Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 06:10 am
Title: One - Target sighted

I can say that I hate Carmen right now, and I want to her to get a beat down from Josef's wife for trying to bed her man.  Afterwards I want her run over by a semi!!  Audrey should stop asking Nichole to do stuff for that ungrateful, hateful shrew that she calls her baby.  Negress please, disown that ho!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 03:10 am
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

Richard and Josef are hot as hell, I am in lust!!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 03:07 am
Title: One - Target sighted

Carmen has some serious problems, to just destroy marriages for business, what a Ho. I can see why Richard loves  Nichole but I don't think she will look his way if he stays in business with Carmen. I will love it if Josef Manteri gave Caremen hell casue that Ho need a good smack down.

 Reviewer: lovinn Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 03:05 am
Title: One - Target sighted

I'm excited and can't wait for Richard's grand entrance. How does Richard know Carmen/Nichole and when did they meet? Where's Richard's wife and why is Nichole lusting after a married man (we already know Carmen is a skeez)? lol I can already see things ending very badly for Carmen already. Please update soon.



Author's Response:

Richard is not married. Josef Manteri is the man that he is watching for Carmen, he is married. Richard knows Nichole because he works for Carmen and he met her once. Nichole has no idea that Richard likes her. I am sorry if this is confusing. I will got back and read my story again and try to clarify the confusing text

Thank you for reading and commenting

 Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2012 12:55 am
Title: One - Target sighted

Great start, please contine your story

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 11:57 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Why does she hate her sister', can't wait to find out.

 Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 11:09 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

I like it so far.

Carmen is a mess.

Update again soon!

 Reviewer: juleah Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 09:57 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Yea......Carmen needs a harsh visit from the Karmic B.I.T.C.H. Drop Squad. And soon.

 Reviewer: Leo the Yardie Chick Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 09:55 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Carmen, chooses to destroy someone's life , just because they chose not to be with her. I'm surprised she hasn't gotten beaten down. If the next target is interested in her sister, that's not good either since he is married. If he is getting  divorced that would be diffeent, I would hate to view her as being like the slut sister of hers.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 09:22 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

I like it!!!!! Carmen is...trashy, but you write her well!!!! I can't wait for Nichole and Richard to meet! I hope Manteri has mob connections and teaches Carmen a lesson.

 Reviewer: idiotendenial Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 09:16 pm
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

Beautiful cast!

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 08:46 pm
Title: One - Target sighted

Why would Carmen call targetting rich men and breaking up their families is a business? Why is she so evil? The fact that she doe's this to her own sister is awful. I am surprised that she hasn't been beaten up by now by an enraged wife or one of her victims. So by Nichole taking the ho her keys will she see Richard? Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 07:59 pm
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

Good cast. Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2012 07:47 pm


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