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I just started reading this story and it's great, please update soon....Carmen is mental!

 Reviewer: Skip2641 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 11 2012 04:14 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

Wow, I can't believe how delusion Carmen is. I love how Richard knew and asked Nichole about her sister and knew what Carmen tried to do by side stepping any blame, when it was all on her.

I hate how they have to pretend to break up to catch that bitch on her lies and manipulations to get some revenge,but I still wish they didn't have to. Carmen really need to die soon

 Reviewer: lovinnforgiven Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 02 2012 11:17 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

deliciously nasty story

 Reviewer: valis202 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 02 2012 09:46 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

That Carmen is a mental case. Her folks should have put her on a 72 hour hold for evaluation back when she was in high school. She doesn't seem to have any redemptive values. I want to understand her and have compassion, but I just don't. Seems like everyone would be better off without her including herself.

 

Will look forward to the next chapter!

 Reviewer: Alyce Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 02 2012 12:57 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

That was a good idea on Richard's part.  I can't wait till Carmen figures out she has been tricked by Richard and her sister.

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 11:16 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

Carmen thinks that she has all of her sh€€ covered but there is always someone who grows a conscience.i hate this bitch with a passion AWESOME JOB!!!!

i think that Richard's plan WILL work because Carmen only cares about whAt she can see. She does not care about the reason why this is happening. She does not invest time into what her actions cause until it beats the sh&& out of her!

i am so glad that Richard listened to Nichole about Carmen checking up on him. She knows her sister but I don't think that she knows everything about Carmen. She doesnot  know what Carmen's jealousy will drive her to do. I so want to read more please Update!!!!!!!!!

 Reviewer: Water Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 08:08 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

I think he should just ask her to what lengths does SHE think Carmen would go to hurt her. I think Nichole has a pretty good idea already. That would be way better than him withholding info from her. I also think they should let the mom into the picture, because mom seems to be on a mission of her own, and if they could coordinate, then Carmen wouldn't stand a chance.

All the same, I am enjoying your story, and look forward to reading however you spin it out.

 Reviewer: cuppacoffee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 12:01 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

Beau-ti-ful!!! :)

 Reviewer: LaserLight Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 05:14 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

i hope their plan works out because i want them to be together at the end 

 Reviewer: sandycheecks Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 03:47 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

Carmen is psychotic with homicidal tendencies and I really want Nichole to beat her within an inch of her life.  Loving how protective Richard is but it's going to set off delusional Carmen more.  I feel so bad for Josef so please let him be prepared for the shit storm that Carmen started is about blow.  Awesome!!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 03:15 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

This story will have me thinking about it at work. I think that it is excellent. When you can make your reader HATE a character and then let us into her evil mind. You doing something girl! You are amazing UPDATE!!!!

 Reviewer: The Tackle Box Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 03:12 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

this is great . let carmen hurry up and take a fall so that she get whats coming to her. or let josef wife tear into her behind .but hurry and finsh.

 Reviewer: lady tee Signed [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 02:34 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

Carmen needs help! Why is she so vindictive? There are other men similar to Richard out there. I just hope Richard's plan works.

 Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 01 2012 01:10 am
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

I'm so glad Richard is on her side. Someone needs to tell Josef what is happening. Carmen and Nichole cannot be blood sisters, no where in heck they have the same DNA. Ruining her career as a techer, I'm sorry if I were her sister I'd kill her a@@ myself.

 Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 11:58 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

GREAT UPDATE, CANT WAIT FOR MORE!

 Reviewer: BUDDHA Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 11:12 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

I love the idea of Richard & Nichole Conning Carmen. I was scared for a minute that Richard was believing the bull that Carmen was saying about Danny. As fir Carmen's monologue about Richard and Nichole just shows how crazy she is. I hope Josef and his wife wipe the floor with Carmen. Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 11:06 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

How bad can a bad seed get...I really enjoy your story, please update soon.

 

I cannot wait until Josef's wife handle ms. Carmen

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 10:20 pm
Title: Just Ordinary Cast

i hate carmen........ :)

 Reviewer: ShelbyD Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 10:15 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

You have got to update SERIOUSLY!!!!! 

Rman is coming to town and if they play that they are to together he will try to take Nichole! I'll watch for the beatdown.

i can't believe how crazy Carmenis to think that it is wrong incredulous for Nichole to go after her sister when she is doing the same thing! I hate that bitch!!!!!

THIS STORY IS AWESOME! I LOVE YOUR INCREDIBLE WORK!!!!

 

 Reviewer: Pepper Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 10:04 pm
Title: Six-Strategy{an ugly mind is a terrible thing to use}

I have not read it yet but I want to just say yay!!!!!!!!!!!!

 Reviewer: Pepper Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2012 09:48 pm
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Loved it!! Richard is going in for the kill. Carmen is crazy!! She needs to be checked!

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 18 2012 07:19 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Awesome!

 Reviewer: aprilfool Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2012 04:51 am
Title: Five- Drawing a line in the sand

Drawing a line in the sand.  AWESOME!!!! MORE I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!

 Reviewer: Spiderbite Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2012 12:38 am
Title: Four- I declare...War {glimpse into the mind of a psychopath}

It's confirmed that girl is psyhco! You captured her perfectly! I want Richard to always be there to protect Nichole. I want more of them! Yes I am begging

 Reviewer: Spiderbite Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 11:59 pm
Title: Three Counter-attack and the retreat

LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!! YEAH Nichole finally has found someone that is not affected by Carmen. Carmen hates it and I DON'T CARE IF SHE CRIES!!!!! I hate that bitch! EXCELLENT

 Reviewer: Spiderbite Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 11:20 pm


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