This is pure excellence. I love the way you write. I love the angst between them. Great story. :)
Reviewer: madame z Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 28 2013 03:19 pm
LOL...laughing at your commentary about us hating on your female leads. I admit I'm not a fan of Lana's, but I think they were both dumb to enter into the agreement they did of being fuck buddies with no strings attached. It was stupid because at some point at least one of them develops feelings and wants more from the arrangement. Lana should have seen this coming. I get that she's worried about whether she can have a successful career & a healthy relationship, but if she has feelings for him as well why not give it a shot and communicate her concerns to Lucas. They can figure it out together. Just my two cents. Enjoying the story. Can't wait for next update.
Author's Response:
Being fuck buddies is never a good idea. That's been proven time and time again.
Lets be real, if these two communicated properly the story would be over
promise to make more likeable women in the future.
Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 04:23 pm
I like Lana just fine. Even though I cannot identify with her. I just don't understand why she's doing what she's doing. Apart from your Chapter End Notes, she's a mystery to me. I just don't get her.
And yes, Lucas may be weak - but at least he knows what he wants and is able to withhold himself... I don't want to be raining on your parade, but as a reader, you have to give me a reason to like a character otherwise, she's an anti-hero. Which is fine too.
Author's Response:
No rain here. No one has to like Lana. She's handling it the best she knows how cuz she's shit at this stuff.
I will try to flesh out her character better in the upcoming chapters.
Reviews like these help me as a writer so much thanks!
Reviewer: cuppacoffee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 27 2013 03:21 pm
@ Kaye2008. No one is hating on Lana just because she doesn't want a relationship. I think you need to read most of the comments again. People are just pointing out how rude Lana was with giving him the impression that he is some good for nothing loser. Its totally fine to want to have someone more like her financially. But to offend him like she did was uncalled for.
If Lucas really wants her, he will fight for her, if not then oh well she was right for her hesitation.????? What does fighting for her entail? That Lucas has to agree to letting things remain the same so she can get what she needs, and his evolving feelings will just have to take a backseat??? There is no such thing as fighting for a person who doesn't want to be with you.
I completely disagree with the "if it was the other way around, girls would be making up a lot of excuses for why the guy doesn't want to commit and how the girl needs to be understanding while he gets himself together". I speak for myself, and I'm not like that. When someone is wrong, they are wrong. No one is is saying that Lana should be with Lucas. Nor does she owe him anything. The problem is that Lucas wants more than just a sexual relationship. And Lana knows this. It was stated in previous chapters how she is aware that Lucas has romantic feelings for her. She also knows that he wants more than just sex and that he is hurting because of this. She is not stupid or naive. She is taking advantage of him, because he trying to be everything that she wants, and what he wants doesn't matter.
We know that they have an agreement, but we are human and have feelings. If Lucas feels that he wants more he is entitled to wanting and feel that way. If Lana doesn't want a relationship, she too is entitled to feel that way. If neither are willing to compromise then they should walk away. Lucas will have to find someone else that wants what he wants. And Lana would have to look for someone who just wants sex just like her, since that is the only thing that she can give and want right?
If she knows that she cannot give Lucas what he wants then she shouldn't try to force him in to wanting what she wants. This is why some people doesn't like Lana, not because she doesn't want to have a relationship with him, but because she is trying to force him, to make him want what she wants.
Date: March 27 2013 06:34 am
Again, rules are being changed midstream. Lucas wants Lana and Lana wants Lucas to want her...lol! She somehow wants Lucas to agree to letting things remain the same so she can get what she needs, and his evolving feelings will just have to take a backseat. Well, we'll see how that goes. It doesn't seem like he'll agree because he appears serious about what he's saying. However, crazier things have happened.
Nice!
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 05:28 am
smh at those two. Still don't like Lana and Lucas was asking for pain when he took her back to his apt. Either leave her alone or make her talk to you and work on a true relatiaonship.
Author's Response:
:::slow clap::: You could be Lucas's therapist Lol
Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 05:14 am
ahh Lucas, you've taught Lana how to treat you.
At some point, I hope he comes to the realization that it's best to walk away. If and when she wants what he wants, then, yeah, maybe. But he's got himself all twisted over someone who doesn't seem to give a crap about him, just what he has between his legs. 'cause that must be REAL good, otherwise, she wouldn't be there since it's all about SEX, right? And my question is why doesn't she find someone who only wants a physical relationship? Shouldn't she just move on to the next hard one? Why would she want to hang around with him? Isn't one d*ck just as good as the other?
Author's Response:
Finding someone else for this type of thing wouldn't be easy. Besides He knows her body best.
Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 04:21 am
Thanks for the update. I get Lana, no judgments here; I've been there. I'm rooting for her to to not run away from this relationship. Even if it doesn't ends up working out, I hope she at the very least she puts herself out there and be hurt than not try at all.
As to Lucas, in the right circumstances there are lesser things a man will settle for to have the woman they desire; even if it’s only the surface.
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
First off... I'm honored to have a comment from you. lol .::fangirling:.
And yes. Lucas just wants Lana.
While Lana is just trying to look out for #1
Thank you!!
Reviewer: siennagray Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 03:37 am
I think he needs to put his foot down and make her talk, instead of leaving.
Author's Response:
He should. You know how after an arguement you think of all the things you should have said and done?
He's prolly doing that right now.
Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 03:26 am
The reason why I dislike Lana is because she is a user. In previous chapters she has stated that she is aware of Lucas's deeper feelings but continues their "relationship", that's not cool cause she is taking advantage of him. Also I completely disagree with all the readers that say that if the roles were reverse we would be sympathetic to Lucas and provide excuses for him. I can only speak for myself and say that if Lucas was acting the way Lana was, I would be applauding Lana for finally seeing the light and realize that she deserves better than what lucas is giving her and prayed that she found someone that treated her ten times better!!!!! I would see her as strong (not weak!) women for seeing that this relationship is toxic. Furthermore everybody who is saying that Lucas is weak for not being able to stick with the "relationship" requirements are forgetting that he is a human being entitled to choose what he wants and doesn't and if he feels like he wants more, he is entitled to that. If Lana doesn't want give more she is entitled to that too. So then Lucas goes and finds somebody that wants what he wants and Lana should go and do the same not keep trying to force him to want what she wants. Lastly if we're basing Lana's strength on her relationship with Lucas, I don't consider her very strong because she is the one that issuses conveying what she wants and is unable to let go!
I think your ability gain such strong opinions from your readers is real talent, keep it up!!!
Author's Response:
Lucas did the right thing letting her go because Lana was foolin. She's a mess really. Lucas is actually the stable one I'd say.
I think Lucas is weak FOR Lana. He can't really help it. He's weak for letting her back in (just before kicking her right back out).
He'll work it all out soon
Thank you for reading
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 03:00 am
No one is hating on Lana for not wanting a relationship either. She doesn't have to have one if she doesn't want to. The thing is that she is sleeping with a guy who has caught feelings for her and wants that. They may have had an agreement, but if this is hurting him and he is getting to attached then they should end it. Because it will only hurt him. Lana knows all this. She knows that he has feeling for her. He is spoiling her and doing everything that she wants and she is taking advantage of that. She takes and takes, but is not willing to give anything back. This is why some readers are angry or kind of hating on her.
Plus, no one is hating on Lana because she is being a selfish. They are just pointing her wrong doing out. I totally understand that she may have her reasons for not wanting a relationship. But the things she said to Lucas was heartless. She is acting as if Lucas would need her help financially or something. Its totally okay if she wants to have a partner more like her financially. There is nothing wrong with that. But she has no right to give him the impression that he is some good for nothing loser. She insulted him and bluntly told him that his life and apartment is worthless and that just by adding rugs to his apartment over the chop shop didn't make it a home. So he is only good enough to fuck but not anything else.
She is sending mixed signals by some of the things she does. Besides that she knows damn well that he has feelings for her and that this type of agreement that they are having is hurting him. He tolerated it for a long time, but now Lucas feels that he can't keeping going on like this. I know that they made an agreement about their sex relationship but it's not fair for Lucas if they continue with it because he has feelings for Lana. He has every right to stop if he wants to, and Lana will have to accept it. If she can be selfish towards Lucas and treat him as a toy, then Lucas has every right to be selfish and think about himself too. Since its only sex that Lana is interested in and wants a man who is at the same level as her, she won't have any problem getting it somewhere else. Lucas wants more, Lana is not ready, or maybe not willing to give that to him. So the best is for them to stop seeing each other. Its as easy as that.
Author's Response:
Whoa ya'll feel some type of way huh? It's cool, it's supposed to be that way.
Lana was cruel. Sometimes people say things in anger that they claim they don't mean but in actuality there's always some truth to it. Her request was reasonable, execution was flawed. She could have chosen her words more carefully to lessen the blow. It still would have hurt him but she wouldnt have seemed like such a bitch.
And yes, she's using him. Mostly because she doesnt know what she wants.
I kind of think that deep down Lana thinks if she's cold enough he wont have these feelings for her anymore. And things can go back to how they were.
It would be smart for them to just stop. But come on, Lucas is so stuck on Lana that even though he wants to end it he's having a hard time going cold turkey. Lana knows this.
Reviewer: Ms.stars Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 03:00 am
I call it as I see, yes Lucas caught feelings but did she have to be so cruel? You are right I don't know anything about her background, but she has made it so that I don't want to either. It's wrong to treat someone like they are nothing whether it's a man or woman!!
Author's Response:
I think it's a defense mechanism for her.
One she should probably abandon because it's not helping
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 02:58 am
Lucas deseves so much more that Lana is willing or able to give. Lana is an *itch and I want run over by a yugo!! Lucas is weak but at least he told her leave after he got his. Afterall that is really all that heifer deserves. She may be unsure about having a career and a relationship but it's not right to use the man. To make him feel like he's wrong and is the one with the problem when it's her with the problem. Lana makes my teeth itch!! Looking forward to reading more!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 02:53 am
Wow...great update...please update soon
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: March 27 2013 02:50 am
Lucas forgot the old saying.. Be careful what you asked for because you just might get it.. I can see where they are both coming from but I think Lana didn't have to put it out there like that.. Has Lucas every asked her for anything?? Or made her feel that she was paying his way? She has to know that living in a warehouse is not cheap regardless if it's month to month it's expensive as hell..
This is a great story..
Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 25 2013 09:10 pm
I am shocked by all the hate that is being spewed out about Lana. We know nothing about her past and just because he has decided to change the rules doesn't mean that she has to jump on board quickly.
If it was reversed we women would be coming up with all kind of excuses for him and why he has trouble commiting (he was hurt in the past, his mom was horrible etc ect) but when it's reversed she is stupid and a b*tch, really??
Talk about double standards. Let's learn more about Lana and her past, we know nothing and who says that Lucas is just some great guy, lets learn more about him too. This hate on Lana is crazy, come on ladies stop judging Lana, there is more to her then we know I am sure.
Great story!!! I like Lana she is relatable to women who don't jump head first into relationships.
Date: March 22 2013 08:56 pm
I'm fully on board with Lucas. If the roles were reversed, we'd be mentally screaming at Lana to run for the hills.
Reviewer: Leo the Yardie Chick Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 06:34 pm
It's Lana's prerogative to want a man who's more like her financially. Hell, I even share that opinion irl to an extent.
But don't hook up with an artist whose lifestyle you don't approve of then act like you're better than that.
I'm proud of Lucas for standing his ground.
Author's Response:
Lana was wrong. She knew what he was and had no problem with it. But she has an ideal man, and it's not him.
She felt the need to express that in a manner totally unnecessary.
She was rude as hell.
Reviewer: paayush Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 02:59 pm
Wow go Lucas. He just laid it out there. Her response was chilling when she said that she would have to support him and that just by adding rugs to his apartment over the chop shop didn't make it a home. Ouch!!! Thanks for a great update.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 02:05 pm
What a stupid b*itch! Now she is getting exactly what she deserves and that is being kicked to the curb! Lucas I am so proud if you now remain strong don't let that succubus back in your life to use you. Excellent chapter!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 12:29 pm
:)
Reviewer: Emy Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 10:40 am
I agree with Lucas. Yes, in the beginning they might have agreed to be fuck buddies, but she's aware that he has feelings for her now. She is sending mixed signals by some of the things she does. But then to say that he's not good enough for her is a slap in the face. She's not being honest with herself that she likes him as well. Really enjoying this story.
Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 07:08 am
That's right, Lana; that medicine you dish out doesn't taste so good, does it?
Reviewer: tens Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 06:51 am
Well this is a situation. On one hand, I have to agree with Lucas on this one at this point in this little once a week pit stop. He's tired and he wants things cemented between them, whichever way, for good. On the other hand, he's changing the rules of the game on her.
Lana; she really needs to decide what she wants to do here. Because, honestly, how much more insulting could she be. She just told him he's not good enough for her onany level outside of the bedroom. Damn! Then gets mad when he call her out on it and says just that. I personally think she's making a lot of assumptions about him and his position in life. As she even taken the time to really find out? You can't judge a book by it's cover.
At the same time, she seems conflicted about her thoughts on the whole situation. She knows how he makes her feel, but it doesn't square with what she thinks she sees. She making it all very complicated.
Nice!!
Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 05:50 am
Great update . I'm glad Lucas finally got a backbone , let Lana chase after him for a minute . Can't wait to read more .
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: March 22 2013 05:46 am