While I would love a Henry POV, this story has been told from Val's viewpoint that I think it should stay that way for this story. What makes it so intriguing is that we don't know what the hell is going on in Henry's mind most of the time. Although you haven't wrote specifically from his side of the street, we gain more understanding when he opens up to Val and we see her growth as well in those moments. He is like a Xmas gift that is already wrapped so prettily under the tree that you are anxious to find out what the gift is but don't want to destroy the wrapping so you take your time, is careful, delicate when you finally have the opportunity to open it, if that make any sense. I can see his thoughts as a reflection at the end after hopefully a HEA *wink, wink* of what he went thru with his courtship of Val. Hope this helps. I am sure I will love whichever direction you go in.
Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 06:25 am
Henry pov can flow if u talk about the day he left a the past 4 since she's seen him :)
Reviewer: mrmalone Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 05:57 am
I personally do enjoy understanding what the characters are thinking/feeling from both the female and male POV's ( as long as it doesn't give up too much before you want it to). If it gives up too much, then maybe a separate short story afterward would be better to ensure you don't interrupt the flow. I like the pace of the build up of the story, and your attention to detail. Thanks!
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 05:32 am
Hmmm I think not knowing his POV keeps us wondering and more realistic to a females thought process especially when you have a guy like Henry. I think doing another story in his POV would be a better option. Because IMO I like that I don't know what's going on in his head. I would certainly like to figure out! Lol just not in the middle of the story I think it would ruin the overall emotional attachment that I have to this story lol!
Reviewer: Justkillingtime21691 Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 05:22 am
Not at all! It would be nice to get further insight into Henry's thought process.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 05:09 am
Not at all!! I would like to read his POV. I would like to know his reasons for doing what he does to her. I mean of course he probably thinks he's like his dad in some way. I would like to read his side :-)
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 04:50 am
Please do Henry's pov!!! That would be amazing!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 04:33 am
Personally, I think one chapter from HPOV would be great. At the conclusion of the story, perhaps the epilogue. Maybe as a secondary continuantion. I see Unguarded as Valerie's journey. Selfishly I want to get into his head but at the same time, this is about her. I feel Henry deserves more than a single chapter because he has so much depth. There is so much to explore. I appreciate you reaching out to your audience for input. It shows a desire to really develop your craft. This is just my opinion
Reviewer: PaperRoses Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 04:26 am
IMO it is up to you. I have loved reading this story and trying to figure out what you will write next. I will read whatever you bring.
Reviewer: Qsmommy05 Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 04:16 am
Henry is a wonderful diseaster if I ever seen one. He's too emotinally wrecked for Valerie or any woman for that matter. She doesn't deserve the dissapearing act or the constant apologies. We're all scared of something so him being scared of how he feels for her is no excuse. Like seriously he knows she's really fragile. I myself would love to read henrys pov. I think it'll help us really grasp why he runs everytime it gets too deep. I just hope valerie gets stronger and not weaker. She's gotta start depending on herself for hapiness. I have faith in her though so I think she'll work it out.
Reviewer: aDreamaFantasy Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 04:01 am
I wouldn't mind reading Henry's POV but I think you should make it a side story. I just think it will ruin the flow of the story.
Reviewer: lovelywhitt Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 03:23 am
I would love to read Henry's POV. You can title the chapter extra or bonus or something like that and include in chapter notes basically what you have said: one time only, not intended to move plot forward, etc.
Reviewer: dydrmr Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 03:20 am
I think it's a good idea to get his POV. It would help me understand his Flip flopping.
Reviewer: Apple Signed
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 03:16 am
I would like to see what's going on in Henry's mind
Reviewer: Lisa Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 02:45 am
I personally like to read the other persons point of view, I think it shows how differently people see the same situation.
on another note, you are an excellent writer. to be honest at first I wasn't to sure if I liked this story maybe because I didn't like how she always put herself down or maybe how he acted was too real and close to someone I know, maybe it made me feel uncomfortable. Now I'm addicted to find out what happens between the two of them. urghhhhhh
It is like watching Being Mary Jane, hate how she is letting herself be treated but I'm addicted to watching it happen and understand why she's doing it.Okay next chapter please :-)
Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 02:21 am
I agree with 1nadali
I dont' think a Henry POV is needed and it might very well affect the flow. I kinda like guessing what he's thinking. Although, some of it comes through in the way that he responds to her. But at the end of the day, this is your story andyour muse, go with what your gut says.
Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 02:18 am
Don't change a thing. Henry's pov would be nice but is not necessary. If you're readers want to know where story is heading they should read first chapter because you started with the ending.
Reviewer: 1nadali Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 02:07 am
One chapter of his POV would definitely clear things up.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 02:04 am
I think a chapter in Henry's voice would be nice. It would be interesting to see where he is coming from when it comes to his life and his feelings about Val. If you chose to do this it is your decision but it would be welcome from this reader. And also this is a great story. Every time I see an update it just gets better and better.
Reviewer: bella200183 Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 02:01 am
For I would like to see the a chapter in He Ry's POV because maybe it would give us insight to what he is truly feeling. I know he explained part of who he is to Val, and it gave me some helpful information but I feel like it's always one sided only because we don't get to see Henry's feelings when Val pushes him away. At the end of the last chapter we could feel for Val because Henry hadn't called or txted but I think there is a bigger picture as to why he hadn't done it. At the end of the day it would be interesting to see how it plays into the flow of the story.
Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 01:54 am
The way you have written your story has been done in such an outstanding form that I feel as though I know Henry, therefore Henry's POV is not needed, imo.
Henry is scared; scared of loving Val and scared of comittment to any woman. He don't want to be like his father, but that is who he is emulating. His early example of love came from his parents; that example was nothing to brag on.
Even though Henry has issues, his POV won't change the fact that he hurt Val, badly. Now the worst thing was when she saw him on the Internet... I wouldn't want to know Henry's POV--he spilled his guts, was super affectionate, introduced her to his family, rocked her world, gave her a kitty, and then disappeared to show up much later on the Internet smiling and happy.
Even if Henry was in the hospital or in jail he would have ascess to a phone, so there is no excuse. Nah, a POV is not required, Henry just needs to come correct, with knee pads.
sidenote: i saw you had put in an update and I got all excited. Before clicking on update I wanted to enjoy this and got myself a PB&J and made a smoothie...clicked on it and saw QUESTION, Giiirrrll...
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 01:53 am
I would love a chapter in his PoV. Everyone is wondering why he keeps hurting Val. I want to know how he feels about her. He may say he's falling for her, but that could just be to make her happy.
Reviewer: MiAmourrr Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 01:47 am
I was wondering why you did not write in Henry's POV more. I think you did one chapter in his POV before and I liked it. If it wasn't a whole chapter it was a section where it was his POV, I think. Maybe you were just talking about doing it, but I thought for sure I read his point of view at the beginning of the story. Anyway, I think incorporating his POV would be nice. It would be nice to know what Henry is thinking and feeling because we all know what Val is thinking, lol! It would help explain why he does what he does. Even though most of us can read his issues and what might be holding him back, it would be helpful to actually know from his POV. I cannot wait for another update!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 01:37 am
Instead of Jason POV, make it a third party POV, to lend an unbiased and abject development of Jason's story. No judgment but mere rendition of his story. Quite frankly jason has been a dizzying ride, and I really need an independent viewpoint, why would he could not have a decency to acknowledge a simple text or phone call.
Reviewer: Agape Realms Signed [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 01:31 am
Heck yes, I want to know what's on his mind. How he is feeling about the relationship and what makes him turn into to Casper so much ( okay, I just revealed my age) lol. I would love to read a chapter with his POV.
Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 26 2014 01:26 am