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Title: Chapter 2

Cool update.
Do whatever you want, this is your story. I hope that you have fun with this story, I also like that you are not wasting time getting to the fun lol, there are to many stories with a lot of buildup, that makes me stop reading lol.
Take advice but do not change your style, people will either read or they will not but someone will... like me :)

Update Soon!!!

 Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 05:27 am
Title: Chapter 2

Just a few more notes after reading this chapter. I think you may want to rehink the progression of your story. The grammatical errors are still their so be careful. You are also moving the relationships too quickly. They have known each other how long and are already staking claim? Highly unlikely. You want your narrator to be believable or people will cease to be interested. Thats fine if you are doig drabbles or one or two shotters, but if you avtually want this to be an extended piece then you have to mind your progression rate and pace. Hope this helps.

 Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 04:29 am
Title: Chapter 2

Just a few more notes after reading this chapter. I think you may want to rehink the progression of your story. The grammatical errors are still their so be careful. You are also moving the relationships too quickly. They have known each other how long and are already staking claim? Highly unlikely. You want your narrator to be believable or people will cease to be interested. Thats fine if you are doig drabbles or one or two shotters, but if you avtually want this to be an extended piece then you have to mind your progression rate and pace. Hope this helps.

 Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 04:27 am
Title: Chapter 1

Your story has promise. If you want it to live up to that promise, then I think some work needs to be done onn structure and fluidity. There are quite a few grammatical errors in this chapter. You want to be careful of that. Not every story is going to be perfect but you still want to be careful because it will turn your readers off and distract them. Secondly, the conversations between your chatacters aren't very organic. Its not uncommon to have male roomates. I myself had 3 guy roommates my sophmore year in college. Talke to some guy friends and run your senarios by them and see how the conversations go. Your stoy is your baby and you want to treat it as carefully as possible. Good luck. Looking forward to see your work improve.

 Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 04:20 am
Title: Chapter 2

Interesting start now please update so I see what is happening.....

 Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 03:30 am
Title: Chapter 1

Awesome!!

 Reviewer: LexiCupCake Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 03:29 am
Title: Chapter 2

Oooweeeeee!! Im liking this even more!!! I think i love russian men even more!!! 

 Reviewer: Treale Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 01:39 am
Title: Chapter 2

more please

 Reviewer: renata Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 20 2013 01:28 am
Title: Chapter 1

LOL. Interesting idea, can't wait to see where you take this. I have not read a menage on this site since "Loving Mia" by katmadison, if you haven't you should, it was awesome.
My husband's name is Gabriel Anatoly so I love that name Anatoly lol.

Update Soon!!!

 Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 08:25 pm
Title: Chapter 1

A lot of errors but it looks like it might be a good story.

 Reviewer: cdy1216 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 07:31 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Your story shows promise, could be longer. Looking forward to the next update!

 Reviewer: Hopieland Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 06:44 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Natalie is going fall for awhile Alexander isn't she?  I already like Anatoly the best, are they twins?

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 04:50 pm
Title: Chapter 1

ohhhhh. im liking this!!!! I fell in love with this story as soon as I saw Russian Boys! lol Can't wait to see where this story is headed it!! 

 Reviewer: Treale Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 04:36 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Awesome chapter :D looking forward to the fights between Alex and Natalie 

 Reviewer: LexiCupCake Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 04:33 pm
Title: Chapter 1

OK, I can't get past why they would make two guys a girls roommate in college?  A disaster is about to happen, or maybe a few lawsuits.  She needs to find her RA and quick!!!

 Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 03:50 pm
Title: Chapter 1

hehe, interesting idea - i look forward to the read, thanks!



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Thanks :D

 Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 19 2013 03:20 pm


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