Ok, that whole scene with Sara...yeah. She and Jace are NOT married, she comes in demanding explanations from him about his behavior, and she's clearly pregnant with someone else's baby? The background on her in this story is gonna be something else! I can't wait to hear it.
Author's Response: Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2014 05:14 am
Breezy, why are you such a punk? You will never know true happiness if you punk ass continues run from life. I love this story! Will write a flashback of that day so that we know what happened? She is going to feel mighty stupid when she realizes that he divorced crazy ho after learning that he wasn't the father. Had she talked about the situation with either her sister or Paul she would have known about Jace. Dumb, dumb, ditty!! I had to read the update again!
Author's Response: Reviewer: pmgayles Signed
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 04:01 pm
Love it! Can't wait till the next update! Anxious to find out their story. Seems like a lot of lies and deceit went on.
Author's Response: Reviewer: shadow Signed
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 11:09 am
Only 6 mistakes mostly commas misplaced. Great middle and end of chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks Angelbaby for reading. As I have stated in my table of content that this is a un-betaed work of fiction. It has not been professionally edited. But it's something that I'll work on to make your reading experience more enjoyable. Right now I'm working on character development, plot, pace and content.
But please stay tuned.
Yevette
Reviewer: angelbaby Signed
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 04:33 am
Nice updates. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading. I really appreciate it. Stay tuned. Will update again next week.
Yevette
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 10 2014 04:32 am
This is good. I want to know what happened, why didn't show drop kick ole girl and what was the real deal w Paul?
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading. Paul, is just a friend. Infact he was her best friend until she left town. But she didn't want him to have to chose sides between her and Jace. Paul is just very protective of her.
Sara is just a bitch of the highest caliber. She wants Jace and she'd determined to make it hard for him move on with his life. Even if she did deceive him.
Sara is Jace's problem to handle for now unless she crosses the line with Breezy. LOL!!
Stick with me. Things are about to get fun. Don't forget we've got a week in town and a wedding to help plan. It should be lots of fun. Stay tuned.
Yevette
Reviewer: Dallas5star Signed [Report This]Date: July 10 2014 02:13 am
Jace get ready for a fight because she won't let you close again. Did you expect Breezy to stick stound after you'd married crazy town? Why would Jace marry Crazy ho without first verifying that the baby was yours in the first place? Jace, restraining order are the two words thst I have for you!
Author's Response:
Yep, Jace has a lot of explaining to to do. But Sara is quite the manipulator. She just wants something that she can't have. She wants his heart and it belongs to another.
Thanks for reading. Your reviews always make my day!! So stay tuned. Another chapter is coming next week. That's if I can't manage to get it done before the end of the week.
Stay tuned
Yevette
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 10 2014 01:52 am
Im sticking with you. Loving the beginning of the story...cant wait to learn more.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading. I'm posting every week. It's been fun pushing myself and learning about these two as I go along. But there is so much more to come. But it's time for some fun. We've got a wedding to plan!!!
Stay tuned.
Yevette
Reviewer: amlaamar Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 10 2014 01:43 am
Wow! Aside from the obvious with Sara, is the base of this problemnot being sorted and resolved was that they didn't communicate with each other when the needed to?
Without knowing the specifics yet, I will say that they both made it way too easy for Sara to get as far as she did. And that's by not talking.
Breezy I see is a runner. That's hard to handle from a partner. She doesn't stand still long enough to listen to anything so this is what happens.
Jace lets her run. Even with Breezy not being there, what just happened with Sara, shouldn't have. He should have had this cleaned up with her long ago. She walked in like she owned the place and him, insulted his character concerning Breezy, insulted Breezy, then walked the hell out like the Queen of everthing while basically laughing at them all. Really?
They both need to wake up and make some decisions here. However, we'll see what happens next.
Nice!!
Author's Response:
They have a big communication problem. Breezy is going to have to stand her ground. She has let too many things in her life go unresolved with no closure. Jace, although a fighter, has got to learn to fight a little harder for what he wants. He's kind of use to getting what he wants and not having to work at it where women are concerned. But Breezy poses a challenge and she always has. He wants to be more for her. But he just doesn't know how.
And Sara has gotten away with her behavior for far too long. She needs to accept the fact that they are no longer together and let Jace move on with his life.
I'm pretty certain that it's Breezy that she has a problem with. That's because Breezy has managed to do what none of the others have. She captured his heart. But as long as Sara thinks he's miserable, then she's happy. She doen't really care about the other women. Because she knows that he does not love them.
But things are about to get fun!! We've got a wedding to help plan and it should be very interesting especially with Phoenix.
So stay tuned. I love your reviews. They make me really think. And as always thanks for reading.
Yevette
Reviewer: flikchick Signed
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 01:21 am