*Sigh.* That was the HOTTEST thing I've read in awhile.  Man...*Sighs again.*

Reluctantly, I have to address "the elephant in the room, "  Chase.  What is the grandmother up to?  This Chase "thing" is all so frustrating.  So Chase donated the money for the kids' trip?  Hmm....I see Lila was a little happy about that and then thought that what she did in the truck was a mistake but her flesh is so weak...though I loved reading the sex scene on the kitchen floor, I have a feeling that it was just GREAT sex for Lila and nothing more. Jack is gone but I KNEW he was even before I read the "I love you."  Lila's response...well I will just say this...IF Chase is the one she's going to end up with...I'm going to need a little chapter that focuses more on Chase and his thoughts. I feel like I don't know much about him besides the facts that he's a BOY (who took his parents' death hard)....and is obsessed with Lila. He's not my favorite character in this story right now.  Just saying. 

Ah...I see what you did there....so I will take back what I said about Jack possibly sending Chase to foster care instead of taking him in...instead he could have just shipped him off to some fancy boarding school never to be seen again.  I CAN see Chase's side of things..I would imagine that being alone in a big ass house when your parents have just died is not a very good feeling.  Jack SHOULD have been around more.

Well Lila can see clearly now the mistake she made with Chase.  Chase is too attached to her.  *Shakes head.*  A 17 year old asking a 28 year old to come with him to college?  To be honest, I was going to write this story off because there's something about this whole Chase thing that rubs me the wrong way.  If he has any romantic interest in her I need him to try again when he's at least legal. 

I'm glad I decided to give this story another chance...I'm a fickle person when it comes to online fictional stories but for now I will continue to read. I can understand Lila more...and she had a sister...

I liked reading this chapter.

You know that was fucked up what Chase did....leaving her door wide open and taping a pic of a nude Lila and Jack to her front door for the whole world to see? Nah, son...dude would at least get cursed out.  Everyone handles Chase with kid's gloves....it's like damn...

You're a good writer...I have to give you that. I don't know where this story is going but with that job interview at Harvard of all places which Lila was supposedly "blindsided" by and all the other little ish that happens when her and Chase are around each other...it's like I can see the writing on the wall. I'm going to be real honest...I might not continue with the story.  However, I would love it if Jack has his own story....just want to throw that out there (because there are just some subtle clues that make me think that it's not going to be Jack and Lila.) I could be wrong though...

I kind of wished she would have let Jack leave.  What is it about Lila that has Chase and Jack so fucking obsessed with her?  I still think they all need therapy or....something especially Lila and Chase.  That grandmother is a mess.

The twists and turns this story has taken...I have to say I enjoyed this chapter.  Ah, about the keys...I see what you did there....never would have thought about Ashley but that girl is pure venom because she knows how Chase feels about Lila (you wrote that he babbled about her all night while trying to hook up with Ashley)...and she knows that Chase will will NEVER feel that way about her. The way Lila reacted in her office with Chase...is what I expected (or wanted as I said as much).

I will have to say that some questions that I wondered about were finally answered in this chapter.  In a previous chapter, Chase mentioned something about their parents' accident to Jack....and it made me wonder if Jack put those keys in their hand the night of that fatal accident.  So now I know...and it's so sad about Lila's sister.  You've added a new twist to this story with the Ashley character...and I'm wondering just what is going to happen next and is Chase going to be there for Lila (well if the story goes that way with the Ashley character)?  Yeah I'm not too keen on Chase and Lila but at this point...it's like whatever.  

Once again, I have to say that you are a good writer with some really amazing skills...to get such strong reactions from your writing is a job well done. 

Hmm....this chapter is all over the place but in a good way. First, Jack's pain was palpable.  I truly felt for him and wished he find another woman to love fiercely because it was inevitable that Chase is going to win over Lila.  But Chase, I was actually realizing that it he might be it and accepting it until he pulled that obsessive move.  Lila seemed frightened not turned on at all...or was it a mix of fear and arousal? Knowing Lila it was probably the latter.  He wanted her so much that he was holding her hostage in his arms not letting go AND crying?  Wow.  His obsession was almost hard to read.   Jack ...and Jack's Granny telling him to let her go and him not listening....of course he wasn't.  But the pics?  Did he really have someone take them or set up hidden cameras?  SICK.  If true he's WORSE than Chase. I was truly thrown reading that last sentence and Lila's realizaton.  I mean she leaves Chase and goes to Jack (well calls him and goes to his home) which makes it seem that she chose Jack over Chase and finds the pics?  Surely, someone is setting Jack up.  If he did it though, it's just makes one wonder WHAT IS IT about THIS woman that makes these two men brothers at that go MAD CRAZY over her?  I'm still thinking someone set him up...but I can be so sure with this story.  I would really like if it another guy was introduced right now into this story, lol  as she doesn't need to be either of them (not until some major issues are worked out)  but I know it's focused on these three and I can't wait to see how this one ends.  

I felt Jason's pain...good writing. I love this story but especially these two characters so much. 

I enjoyed this chapter..I love Devyn's friendships.  So she sketched Jason?  Interesting.  Even though I don't like how he is intent on Devyn telling him the truth (as if she owes him), I think they'd make an interesting pair.  Honestly, why can't he just get his detective friend to follow Erin...since she's being sloppy and even fucking the club.  Just saying...if he didn't want his detective friend to find out what he's up to...hire another. What was the point of having Devyn checked out like that? When he coud have just hired someone to see what Erin is up to when she's not with his brother?  Oh I get it...that little background check wasn't about  bringing Erin down, lol (though he definitely wants to bring Erin dow)/...his detective friend had him pegged. Hmm...wonder what his "social circle" is going to think when he brings Devynm "the Bohemian" to the dinner party?  I'm intrigued by this story to say the least.

Gosh I'm loving this too much...I wonder how long they are going to dance around whatever they're feeling?  I can't wait until they smas...ahem *clash* (again). LOL.  I loved Christopher in both chapters..it's a shame that he's being cheated on...

I love these two so much. I see their connection is growing by leaps and bounds. Are they going to make love now? Devyn seems so innocent. I hope they define what they are to each other soon. Are they just dating or are they going to be in an exclusive relationship? Honestly, I can't wait to read about his parents' reaction.

That was...nice.  Devin worried about not being this wild, wanton woman and even going so far as explaining it to him, when she should have been worried about them not using any protection, lol.  But...there's just something about these two characters.  *Sighs*  Aw, Jason thinks he's in love.  I wonder what his parents are going think of their....well whatever *this* is that is brewing between them. Obviously, it's going to led to a relationship...an important one so his parents...hmm...well let's just see how you are going to write it.

If I could say that this was a surprising turn of events, then I would be lying.  I knew that his preliminary investigation of Devyn would come back and bite him in the a**.  I honestly didn't think he needed to investigate her in the first place just because he saw her business card fall out of Erin's purse.  It was just business but then again Devyn thought she was protecting Erin from the big bad fiance...Devyn will forgive him though, lol.  Her lying for a woman she didn't know made him suspicious so I do get his reasons.

I have a feeling she is going to break the Rules that Celia is laying out for her.  How long are they supposed to be "pretending" again?  I can't believe he hasn't figured out that she's not a real model yet...all the signs are there.  And his ex-girlfriend shows up at a concert in Sydney of all places?   

I like this story a lot-so much so that I've read the story from the beginning a couple of times and read a few of the chapters several times.  Sure, it was weird how they cashed and argued all the time, even after they had sex for the first time but there is something that draws me to these two-maybe it's because when they are together they let go of any inhibitions and are so wanton without worrying about any possible (dangerous) backlash.  I knew Richard felt something-that would lead to stronger feelings-when he defended her to that trashy white woman.  

Shonti is a diva but she wouldn't be Shonti if she wasn't-I'm glad that she is sharing her feelings with Richard about how much she cares for him and wants him to see his full potential.  Good for Richard-sometimes you just need someone who cares to push you towards your dreams when you are you are not sure of them yourself-you want to do something but afraid of failure.  Fantastic that he is going for his dreams but I see that he wants Shonti right there beside him.

Now, I would love to read about the two apart-realizing how much they miss each other--LOVE each other. It's amazing that you could fall in love after such a short period of time (especially when most of that time is spent bickering) but I think Richard started falling for her in Nashville.  I would love for them to admit their love to each other...we haven't read Richard's thoughts on whether he was in love with her but you can tell.  I think Shonti will move after several months...maybe Richard should visit her in Chicago to help her make up her mind quicker, lol.  It would be interesting to see how she reworks her new blog or maybe she will start a new career.  Until Richard make it big, she will most likely be the breadwinner-because yes I think they will be together (maybe they will get married?).