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Lila's Thunder by Voices
Rated: 17 and older
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[Reviews - 359]
Summary:

  

 

Lila James knows that her friendship with seventeen year old Chase Almeida is extremely inappropriate, but she still isn't prepared when his older brother Jack decides to tell her just how inappropriate it actually is-- inadvertently igniting a fire that had been burning quietly inside of them for years.

*****Lila's Thunder has been removed for editing, refining and if all goes according to plan, publishing! I couldn't have finished it without all my readers leaving their words and thoughts--even if I didn't always like them--so THANK YOU from the bottom of my heart. <3



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: Original Character(s)
Classification: General
Genre: Drama, Erotica, Family, Suspense
Story Status: None
Pairings: Original
Warnings: Adult Situations, Dark Fic, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 12
Completed:Yes
Word count: 670
Read Count: 65034
Published: October 07 2011
Updated: September 09 2014

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Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I love this story and you are an AMAZING writer.. very discriptive without being OVERLY discritive which can make chapters way too wordy and you end up losing all that good feeling and chemistry that comes in a story like this. And I love how the characters are slowly developing and how you feel how much they all seem to really care about eachother and how much Lila cares for those kids. I just love the way you write lol

Im beginning to see how much alike Chase and Jack are especially when it comes to Lila. They play on her emotions and use them to manipulate her into doing what they want. The way they talk to her and watch her waiting for her to give in and bend to them. They're all in a huff until they start to see shes wavering and then they start sweet talkin her lol. But even though shes so sweet and wants to please and do whats best for everyone shes no push over and I like that. Otherwise she'd be in BIG trouble between these two.

Chase is kinda hard on Jack but Jack definitely should have tried harder to be there for him. I think Chase would have appreciated even a little effort but so far its lookin like he was NEVER there when he should have been and Chase WAS just a child. But it seems like Jack was running from some things as well and Im getting the feeling there is more to Jacks story than we've seen so far. No one is an innocent party in this except for 13 year old Chase and hes not 13 years old anymore. Its def time for him to grow up and Im seriously PRAYING he doesnt screw up his chances in Harvard over this.

Anyways, Im lovin this story.. Def a fave.. Update soon =)

 Reviewer: Lanee Signed
Date: October 29 2011

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