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Crossing the Finish Line by wisedec4u
Rated: Mature Content
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When the lines are drawn, will you risk your life to cross them for love?

In the Summer of 1988, tragedy hits home for Charlene Jacobson and her father when her little brother is killed playing a game of basketball in their Detroit housing projects.  She soon finds herself living in the small rural town of Millersville, Georgia, with her estranged grandmother. Millersville is a place where time stands still and the racial divide is as prevalent as the 1950s.  Secrets, lies, and betrayal lurk in every corner. Yet, through it all she finds solace in the arms of Ryan Quinn, a white senior track star and the son of the town Sherriff.  

Will their love cross the finish line?  

EDIT:  Crossing the Finish line has been removed from this site and a revised version with added new content has been published on Amazon Kindle Vella (as of November 2022) under the penname, Shelly B Williams. To those of you who have left reviews, added me to your Favorite Authors and Story Alerts, and helped to make CTFL one of the Top Ten Most Favorited Stories on Valent Chamber, I trully appreciate all the support you have shown me over the years. I hope you will continue to support me as I begin the next phase of my journey as a published author. I couldn't  have done this without you. 

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Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Drama, Romance
Story Status: Completed
Pairings: Male/Female
Warnings: Adult Situations, Drugs/Drug Use, Extreme Language, Graphic Violence, Homosexuality, Original Characters, Racism, Strong Sexual Content , Work in Progress
Challenges: Deep, dark, and mysterious
Series: None
Chapters: 4
Completed:No
Word count: 5758
Read Count: 214701
Published: November 07 2010
Updated: January 09 2014

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Title: Chapter 1: Cast of Characters

This is my first time reviewing but I love this story & I'm glad for the update....I think Charlie should tell Ryan what's going on & they decide together what to do b/c they promised each other no secrets but please don't let her break-up with him---that has become so predictable in stories these days--let their bond become stronger & have them fight this together....they also need to at least speak to Charlie's grandmother b/c I think that she may be in their corner....I'm glad Charlie is thinking about a future with Ryan---she needs to do what makes her happy & not worry about other people think, including her dad...is Charlie ever going to sing again? I really want her to pursue that & seriously think about going to Cali with Ryan...I'm also curious about their fathers---I think Ryan's father was involved with Charlie's mom before she got with Charlie's dad.

 Reviewer: dvm2b02 Signed
Date: March 24 2013
Title: Chapter 1: Cast of Characters

Oh boy I'm glad that Charlie decided to tell Ryan the truth--I was really worried for a moment & the fact that grandma already knows that something is going on is even better...I really like the subplots a great deal--I think they give both Ryan & Charlie more depth...Wes having feelings for someone who is hung up on an ex has me puzzled---do we know this girl? Is it possibly Mia?  Plus, I'm not liking Keisha's behavior toward Eric...this guy really likes her & she is using him to get close to James who gives two craps about her--she didn't seem that shallow initially...I hope she wakes up before its too late...thanks for letting Ryan finally hear Charlie sing.

 Reviewer: dvm2b02 Signed
Date: April 17 2013
Title: Crossing the Finish Line

Great update...I'm very happy grandma & Ryan's mother were cool with the relationship and Pumpkin is too cute for words...Ryan's father's reaction didn't shock me-hypocritical much?? Not only does he have a secret life with another woman but he has another child to boot...I am really starting to think that his dad was in love with Charlie's mom but left her because he didn't want anyone to find out-I can't wait to find out that piece of history---I wonder does Grams know the full story of what happened back then....Ryan's brother is really worrying me-I think he is doing some shaddy & racist things with his friends....someone hypothesized that Wes was in love with Christi a while back & after re-reading the story, I'm inclined to believe that, too...I wonder what will happen when Ryan shows up on his doorstep....again, great update.

 Reviewer: dvm2b02 Signed
Date: June 13 2013

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