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Summary:

She got the guy, the fairytale. But when complications of his new life come to light will she be strong enough to keep him?

 

***Please do not post this story to other sites. I post all my stories here with the intention of publication. I thank you all for your attention :)***



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Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: None
Genre: Romance
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Original Characters, Sexual Content , Un-betaed , Work in Progress
Series: None
Chapters: 2
Completed:No
Word count: 129
Read Count: 34246
Published: January 18 2014
Updated: March 31 2015


Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Gram is going to see that billboard and be shocked, while Roxie will be embarrassed (Griff may forget to tell her and she will see it for herself).  The public will wonder why he is with her, when he can be with that--and let's not get into what the other wives will say to her.  

As for the prenup: Roxie will be offended--I would.  If she has not seen that prenup, Griff needs to detroy it and if she has, then they need to destroy it.  I have personally seen a good Last Will and Testament beat out a marriage license.

 Griff just needs legal advice from someone else and take Roxie with him. In fact he could use the new private attorney to look over all his contracts Mick (Mickand Rich are both phoney, greedy and too slick for me). 

At first Mick was relieved when he thought Roxie was ok with the prenup and then he was 'oh it's for her benefit, too' (slick SOB).  Griff needs to come correct.

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Date: December 23 2014

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Griffin will be lost without Roxie--the ride is about to get rocky and they will need to hold on to one another real tight.  Loving this story!  Did Griff go through the papers?  He is keeping stuff from her already though, but I would have still pulled those papers.

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Date: December 23 2014

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I think Griff will have no problem with the groupies, his faith will take a hit if he finds out Mick is just like Rich.  The game is in his blood, but so is Roxie.  I love how he pauses mid-play while looking for Roxie and how she knows this and takes time out to assure him she's ok--they are a force and Mick needs to take note of this.

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Date: December 23 2014

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I think Griff will have no problem with the groupies, his faith will take a hit if he finds out Mick is just like Rich.  The game is in his blood, but so is Roxie.  I love how he pauses mid-play while looking for Roxie and how she knows this and takes time out to assure him she's ok--they are a force and Mick needs to take note of this.

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Date: December 23 2014

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Why does Sasha have to escort Griff?  The driver cqn just drop him off.  I would love to read Mick and Rich having a conversation on their plans for Griff.  Griff needs to get his feet back on the ground fast, bc his so-called agents are about to double team him. I be those two want Griff to travel all over the place, without Roxie.  She is going to need her Dad soon.   Short, but sweet.

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Date: December 24 2014

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I had to stifle my laugh on the MTV project being handed to Rich.  If Mickey trusts Rick, then perhaps Griff shouldn't trust Mickey.  Loved your update!

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Date: January 19 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

She needs to talk to him about everything, bc small things roll into big problems:

The billboard (minor to me, but small things...)

the too small wedding dress was done on purpose (ask Troy if you should lose weight quickly bc his assistant said you could?  Troy would snap.

snapshot of Rose at his table (this was no accident and Rich did this;he also leaked it to ET--who else incorrectly calls her Rosie?  The tacky # was his idea, too)

her doubts creeping in on them not being the 'right' fit.

Griff needs to know all of this and Roxie has to be the one to speak up. Griff needs to come to his senses and realize that hidden prenup could be the deal breaker and get his azz back ASAP!

Wonder what his family and her dad are thinking?

You got me kinda upset--nerves in my lower back are speaking to me :-)

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Date: January 20 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Taken down for publication!

no way would i trust rich to build a house for me.

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Date: January 21 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Roxie is so busy with the wedding and wanting the best for Griff, that she is starting to forget about Roxie--get that resume uptight, go see Kendrick's wife (she will give you some valuable advice), really forgive your dad and call him, and don't join the BB club.  

Glad she put off talking about that prenup, for now.  Hopefully things don't get so bad she give the papers back with her ring.  

Pops will bring the arch and his grammy should come with him to bring the support. 

Griff knows Roxie wants the best for him and he wants Roxie and worries about her. He needs to make sure Mitch understands how important Roxie is to him and Mitch is not.  When Griff sees that billboard and I know his friend's are media savvy and have seem the remarks about he and Roxie--he will then realize why Roxie is becoming unhappy and wants to lose weight (we know she lied and didn't have a big lunch).

I think Mitch is using Rich to do the dirty work of getting rid of Roxie.  I hope his dad gets to meet Mitcha nd Rich...plain talking needed here.

Roxie will not want to fly and meet Griff after Rich has the media do a number on her self-esteem.

Come on Roxie, remember how you fought back in college?  Time to bring out the skates and elbows again!

 



Author's Response:

Oh, Penelope I love these comments! She defintiely needs something for herself and we'll start to see her kind of get some of that in the upcoming chapter. And did I mention these comments are great! Love your way of thinking ;) More to come tonight!

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Date: January 21 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Roxie is crazy--no way would I give him my bag and then tell him about my laptop, hopefully it's locked. She don't trust the man as it is and she should call Griff up and tell him everything.  Why even go through Mick/Rich about when she will see Griff--doesn't she have his schedule and number?

Why is Griff working on those endorsements so hard--doesn't he get paid for playing? If he don't watch it, he is going to saturate the market with him all over the place.  I think they are ripping him off--he is working and they are mooching off him--Griff needs to pull his head out and get a CPA to look over the paperwork and do a drive by that supposedly almost completed house.  

Do Griff/Roxie know exactly how much he is making:  what is coming in and going out?  What degree did Roxie graduate with---please let it be accounting.

I hope she tells Griff, 'since you are so stressed about my decision on this prenup--I am not signing.  If you are so worried about my welfare, double your life insurance.'  Tell him this in front of Rich/Mick.

I knew your update on these two would upset me, but it's all good.  Well actually I want to punch Rich in the throat---twice.

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Date: January 28 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

First thing they ask at the airport 'was your luggage out of your sight at any time?' And you best answer correctly.

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Date: January 30 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

What?!  Where's the rest:-?  Had my heart beating all fast, but I am glad Rich didn't set her up to be taken down by the TSA people.  Troy noticed the difference before Griff and she wasn't even naked.  Hopefully he will ask his employee why she never changed that dress--bet she has done this before.

Griff darling, you messed up--big time: the lackadasical attitude about the prenup, the time away, not noticing the physical change in your girl. Deep down Roxie is not comfortable with the weight loss and that is why she wants the shawl--she is doing things that she thinks Griff wants, but it's making her unhappy.

I think Roxie is withdrawing fast and soon she is not going to care if you get fitted for your tux or not.  

Did Griff turn the prenup papers in already?  I hope it's not too late--do the fitting first and fly to Miami ASAP and cross your fingers and toes. 

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Date: February 04 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I think Roxie is being bombarded with so much--his time away, the comparsion between her and Rose, Rich/Mick distant attitudes.  Really the only one that has been nice and real to her is Troy.  The other BB wives are ok, but she is missing Griff--he is gone too much and too long. How much money does he need to make since his folks believe in hard work?   If she is not going to go with him she needs to look into putting her degree to some use.

As for the house he is planning to surprise her with...big deal--who gets it according to the prenup? I hope she asks him that.  These two need to talk, candidly.  

Both chapters were so good I had to read them again.  They need to have a bonfire for that prenup and he needs to let Mick/Rich know just how important Rosie is to him.

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Date: February 04 2015

Title: Chapter 1: Taken down for publication!

This is my 3rd comment bc I realized after I logged off that for that gown to hang off of Roxie she has lost more than enough weight to fit into a size 10.

I think her BBW friends are ok, but they mean no harm in not recognizing the amount of weight she has lost in such a short time is dangerous, bc it is the norm for them.  They don't know Roxie like Griff does but one did impart some wisdom--basically, make time to do you.  

I don't know how Griff will get and keep Roxie on track without worrying about her, while he is away playing.  Roxie needs to dig deep, visit her dad and maybe he can come through for her this time.  

Roxie wants Griff to concentrate on the game that he loves and not bother him with the stuff that concerns her, she has forgotten that Griff loves her more than basketball and her not talking to him will throw him off his game anyway. 

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Date: February 04 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Thanks the Lawd for Pops!  Bless Troy for trying.

On that flight to see her, Griff needs to ask himself why he didn't 'see' Roxie that night she came to see him--why he didn't focus on the changes he should have felt, since she means so much to him?

Me thinks Rich was talking about something totally different when he said 'I apologize if anything I did was miscontrued'.  He thinks Roxie has told Griff all about his sneaky slights to her.  

I wish Griff would ask Pop and Brody to go check out the house on the beach--I had to lol at this bc I think Pop & Brody will have to light a fire.  

Sad to say but I think after their talk, Roxie needs to 'find her center (herself)' and postpone the wedding until then--Griff will wait. She can visit Gram and her Dad--Dad to forgive him and Gram to feed/nuture her. 

I love a story that brings out my emotions and yours is written so well that I am going to be late for my Dr appt. trying to get my Griff & Roxie update.

 

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Date: February 05 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

This was so good--oh Griff is hurting, but he has to talk to her.  

Roxie has changed her eating habits and while I am all for being healthy, she went overboard without realizing it.   I think she notice something when the dress was too big and she no longer felt special in it, but it didn't click why.   She's lost so much weight she has to be putting tape on the ring in order to keep it on.  

I am also thinking it wasn't so much how her image to the public looked as much as she was just lonely--Griff can talk toher, but in the long run Roxie will have to put in some effort, too. 

 

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Date: February 09 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

When Roxie thought Griff saw her as 'pathetic and weak', I was so upset with her I thought, well, you are acting like it.  But I had to regroup and saw that these two are so intertwined with their thoughts/feelings, but still capable of misreading one another big time.  

Roxie can be strong, but is stubborn mentally and in denial and so fragile physically that her body temp is dropping and she can't even change positions to make love w/o getting faint.  I am glad she ate something, otherwise wouldn't have had the strength to raise that window and escape.  

I think for Roxie to come to her senses, other than an old pic of herself taped to a full length mirror, is for Griff to take her to a doctor or remove what he thinks is causing her stress: him.

I can't see Roxie leaving him there stranded, bc that is one long azz commute.  It's time for Griff to take off the kid gloves.  

 

 

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Date: February 09 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

I don't blame Griff, call the police, but I don't think she is contemplating suicide.  She is sorry for all the trouble she has caused him.  This girl totally folded within a yr of moving--Roxie really needs intense therapy dealing from childhood to why she became the Diva to the weight issue.  Maybe she will get her mojo back and bang Stash and Rich heads together.  

Of course Rich is involved and I can't wait to see what he does for damage control: post pics of the Diva on a billboard, say Griff and Roxie were not together, just role playing, go on tv and say this is why it's important to have prenups, etc. 

Roxie was going downhill fast before the videos were released, the billboard, Rich, the dress debacle, media, and more Rich, triggered Roxie to retreat into her damaged past.  For some reason I feel more sorry for Griff right now.  



Author's Response:

It all just kind of came at once, didn't it? Sigh... Things will move quickly from here.  Won't leave things this way for long!

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Date: February 10 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Usually I will write my comment right after reading an update on a story, which I have come to love, then sleep on it and may do another comment.  This story crossed my mind this morning and my first thought was Roxie...not poor, poor Roxie, but Roxie what the hell happen to you?  

Griff is so hurt and so focus on her problem that Rich can do and say whatever he wants with no consequences.  The only way Griff will find out what he has been up to is if Rich grows a conscience and confessss, which will not happen.  I don't think Griff  is swift enough to figure it out--how can he when his supposedly life partner is keeping stuff from him?  

Didn't these two have a conversation in the beginning of the story about being honest and open with one another?  That lasted until the billboard popped up and prenup papers were hidden in a drawer. I am thinking these two are not ready for marriage.  

Roxie knew when she did those videos there was a chance they would be out there forever--I thought they were suppose to be sexy and not porn; maybe Kerry can broadcast this and others will stand with her.  

The outfit Roxie had on was it an old outfit or the one she recently did for Griff?  My hope is Rich bragging to Micky and Micky doing the right thing.  Oh, woe is me!



Author's Response:

Penelope, I've really loved your comments lol. They're so thorough! Don't you worry. Everything will come in full circle and as far as those who got in Roxie & Griff's way they won't go down without a fight ;) Thanks for another wonderful comment!

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Date: February 10 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Go play ball Griff and let Gram and Aunt Robin enjoy their vacation.  Oh, and cancel that BOLO.  

I am glad she is safe, though :-)

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Date: February 11 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Well, here's my 'after I slept on it' comment :-):

Griff is strong and has his family to help him hold it down, until Roxie come back--and she will be back.  Gram will make him see this; she left her clothes and everything else.  What is important is what Roxie didn't leave--her ring--she will be back.  She will have to come back stronger and better, bc that is who she is deep down; besides, Griff can't play ball worried about her all of the time.  

Roxie told Griff to give her time, she didn't say this is not going to work, but to give her time.  

Professor Peterson/Dad should get a grip, but I can see his side and he is now trying to make up for something he didn't do doing Roxie's most formative years--protect her.  He really can't see that Roxie ran to him, bc he is the root of her problem; she took Griff's last words to her to heart 'are you really ok'. She knows she's not and that is why Claire saw her with groceries. 

Roxie can't heal completely, until she starts with dear Dad and work her way upward toward Griff--oh, and don't worry, Stasha will be visited by the Elbowza. I hope they both get Rich and I don't think Mick is in cahoots with Rich--he's not messing up his cash flow.  

I can't wait until Griff confides in Gram and mention that prenupthat Roxie had to sign.  I hope Gram and Robin meet Rich, too.  OMG!  Your story has just blown me away.

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Date: February 11 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

If Roxie really believed she wasn't worthy of Griff, she would have wrapped that ring in that pitiful note she left him.

How come the dad didn't call Griff like he promised?  Griff had to get his number and still got the defensive stance.  When will her dad realize he needs Griff to help her get over this major hump?

I really love this story but I am hoping my girl has a break through soon. She was only happy for what, 3 chapters...?  

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Date: February 12 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

How long has this girl been on lockdown?  Have the seasons changed?  Still not eating but at least she is not exercising anymore.  If Claire can't talk sense into her then at least send the man his ring back, with a note to move on.  Sooner or later Roxie is going to have to stop crying and snap ot of it, but by then she may have irreparably damaged their relationship.   

I don't know who released the video of Diva: Rich, Kerry, Dad?  All three had an objective:

Kerry to get into Griffin's head & get her husband back out there as the team savior, again

Rich to get Roxie out the way--he probably has Griff posing with nude women by now

her dad to get her home and play daddy for once (please tell on him Claire)

whomever did it, goal achieved.  

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Date: February 13 2015

Title: Roxie and Griffin: Ever After

Go Pops!  He need to move to his place, but Ann needs to meet and put Gram and Robin's mind to rest.  Griff is going to give his Pop what makes his eyes light up...

Whatever happen to the prenup?  Did Griff ever get around the prenup and if he did will it still be valid?

I hated to see this chapter end, bc it signal the ending of a lovely story--Thank you.

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Date: February 18 2015

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Summary:

The next generation has arrived, Chloe Piers is the very smart and beautiful daughter of Tess and Jay who is now 13 years old and entering high school. Maia Ellington is her very best friend, and they share a friendship just as close knit as their mothers do. Khalia Ellington is now a senior in high school who has lofty goals and a sharp tongue, and seems to take more after her uncle. Can our favorite characters, especially Jay, survive being parents to teenaged girls? And what lessons will Chloe, Maia and Khalia learn?



Table of Contents
Categories: Original Fiction
Characters: None
Classification: General
Genre: Comedy , Drama
Story Status: Active
Pairings: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Sexual Content
Series: None
Chapters: 5
Completed:No
Word count: 8528
Read Count: 3089
Published: January 19 2014
Updated: February 03 2014


Title: Chapter 5: Weird Conversations Over Lunch...

He's baccckkkk...13 yrs and Eric's life must be in a funk.  So what if he and Tess had a thing years ago, but then apparently Jay is still feeling the past, too. 

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Date: February 04 2014

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