What's a girl to do when there are two after you?
Hmmm. The all suit case thing was really childish, Casey was being immature and selfish. And it is unfair to blame Sallie for ruining the brother's relationship. I don't really see how. Just 'cause she doesn't let herself being seduced and pressured to stay? They had their own issues way before she arrived. Casey already wanted to go and meet girls, have a life and stop hiding in the forrest. So, even though I wish they could try that threesome thing, I think Sallie did the most logical thing for now: she needs to figure out what to do with her life. She just can't keep hiding in the forrest, and she can't keep running from her problems. Among other things, she has to confront the ones who tried to kill her. When she sorts things out about that, she'll have to confront her feelings and desires towards the 2 brothers. To do that she needs some time alone. I would really like to know more about her, besides the fact that some of her relatives tried to kill her. She worked at a bookstore, right? What about her colleagues, friends, some otherl loving family members ?
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This all convo started out a bit forced but ended up being quite funny. I am just very curious about something: what the hell has Sallie been doing, apart flirting with Casey, for the past two weeks? Doesn't she have a job or something? A couple of close friends, if not some family that don't attempt to murder her? This would flesh out her character a little bit. I would like to know more about Sallie, and to see her be more proactive, not just to go and get her sexy men, but also about her life. I hope she don't end up just waiting around the house to be "shared" or to have a naughthy threesome with the two brother, until she get pregnant or something. I hate when the
Anyway, thanks for the new chapter.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Nice, nice. Thanks for the new chapter. There is finally some action happening. I like the dichotomy between the two brother, Hayes being the oldest is over prtective, and Casey being more gentle. But at some point, it is a thin balance to manage not to turn those traits caricatures with Hayes truning full on alpha jerk and Casey an annoyingly naive goodie two shoes. Same goes for Sallie. I get that she is a bit confused but she should have been offended by the fact that Hayes said he would "give" her to his brother, more than by the fact that he said she couldn't "handle" him. He was obviously teasing her. I hope Sallie is not gonna be some passive doll like character who keeps heistating and then let herself be given or taken but who is able to take initiatives, and act rather than just react. Like turning the tables on Hayes by grabbing Hayes and showing him that she could handle him easily and then letting him panting.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Tess is a sucessful accountant on the fast track to being a firm partner. Unfortunately she is lacking in the love department, Jay is a co-worker and good friend who is ready and willing to help her with this deficiency. But is Tess really over her ex-boyfriend Eric? Unfortunately for Tess, realtionships can not fit neatly on a spreadsheet.
Thanks for the new chapter. I like how tess got herself together. And I liked that, after their time apart, a time they both actually needed, they were able to have a conversation and to actually listened to each other. It's very gratifying to read a story about characters growing more mature, and not staying stuck into cludish behavior for chapters after chapters. Good work.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the update. Jay's reaction is pretty understandable, and I am still siding with him. I am also less mad at Tess, but she really needs to grow up: I get how she feel, but she needs to back down, suck it up, and work at proving Jay she can be trust again. Pushing him to forgive her is NOT the way. She has to earn his trust back. So she needs to respect how he feels, and stop pushing. Be a true friend ad respect his need for space. Step back, use the time she has now to do some soul searching on her own, with a therapist may be, so that she would start to learn why she so easily got back with Eric, and how she can get past that very bad habit. And then, after some time, try and rebuild her friendship with Jay.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapter!I don't think any sympathy for Tess: she ripped what she sowed! She was being a selfidh coward. Jay is totally right to freeze her out.
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Simone Alexander was not adventurous by nature but she was a go-getter. When an unbelievable opportunity comes her way, she does not hesitate to seize it. Now, she finds herself half way around the world immersed in a culture completely different from her own. Here she faces challenges that push her grow in every aspect of her life; the most unexpected of them all......love.
Interesting story and good start. I am looking forward to read more.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapter.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed As Joss and Eshan prepare to wed, will the relationship survive long enough to see "for better" when their families become their "for worse"?
Thnaks, that was nice.
Thanks.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Porter had been gone for while, traveling and moving on with his life. His father’s illness brings him home, but what he didn’t expect was to be drawn back in by the reason why he left—her.
UGH! I really hope I am wrong about this but I am gonna go and say that Travis is Porter's son, and that there gonna be some angst-filled triangle/rectangle mess pretty soon...at one. UGH again !
Anyway, thanks for the new chapter.
LOL. Love triangles are rare when it comes to me but I wil say this story does get complicated, lol. Thanks for your comment!
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed She's a mess he can't help wanting to fix.
I like this story. Thanks for updating...twice. I'd like for Alexa to be more honest with Brody. I was surprised that she lied to him about wanting to leave. get that she is guarded, but the push and pull starts to be a bit annoying : it is the second time that he run after her. Now she needs to either stick to her plan to go back home solo, or let him help her and be honest with him. No need to tell him all her life story, but at least stop disappearing and have him try and understand what is going on.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapters.
So Alexa has been raped by Nathan, right ? And now, both of them have some "big bad secrets" and they are behaving like stupid annoying people about that, not telling the people they love and who love them what it is so that they could help/support/be there for them. Which mean twice more reason to have them shut each other out and do everything but actually talko to each other and be honest with each other. UGH !!! I know it's standard angst/tension in romance but I still can't stand those kind of situations...
Hey! And no problem. I've been trying to post away here ;) These two are defintiely maddening. It's time to take a break and have a good old heart to heart, lol. I promise things will all come in full circle soon. thanks for your comment!
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapters. I like the way things finally got said and done. I can't wait for this party.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for finishing this story. That was nicely done. I enjoyed it very much, even while I was being annoyed by some parts. Very good writing. Hope to read more form you.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed She got the guy, the fairytale. But when complications of his new life come to light will she be strong enough to keep him?
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OK, first thing first, thank for the new chapter. Actually, I have been catching up with the story, reading a couple of chapters straight.
I still like the characters but I am not sure I like the direction the story is going, really. And reading about it going "insane" doesn't sound too good for me.
So, the 1st thing that bugs me is this health/gym/bootcamp thing. Now, don't get me wrong : I am all for Roxie to do what she want to do, especially if it makes her feel good. But why is this situation referred to as her getting or being "healthy" now? Never before was Roxie weight even implied being unhealthy. She's big, but it was never mentionned that her weight badly affected her health. So now her getting to the gym and dropping a few is referred as her getting "healthy". I found it a bit fatphobic , as if being big AND healthy were antithetical. Also, the "glow" thing. All of sudden, Roxie is going to the gym, she feels "happy" (while actually being quite miserable, at least that is what it feels to me), and now she is "glowing". As if she had no "glow" before. I just...I don't like the feel of it : geeting "healthy" even though she wasnt unhealthy before, "glowing" as if she her nice and fun personality was showing and shining before, etc.
Another thing that adds to the odd feelings about this all situation is how insecure Roxie is being. I mean, I get why and how she feels lonely and so so, and for a couple of chapters I could get along with this. But now it is getting annoying.
Like, what with the prenup gate? Why is she making such a big deal out of it? She didn't even read it through!!! Why does she feel "hurt" about it? Like she's a grown sensible woman, she should know this is "standard" and such, especially considereing Griffith's status. It feels like a cheap trick to create drama, really. And she comes off as being kind childish and naive : like she's really that clueless? That's not the Roxie I remember.
Another this is that thing about NOT communicating with Griffith and telling how she truly feels. What's with the faux "Im ok with this", and then turning cold shoulder on him, and then the blowjob and sex, and then cold shoulder again? It's geeting old really fast, girlfriend ! And it is even worse 'cause Griffith is portrayed here as trying everything to make the situation less complicated (maybe a bit too: he should stop coddling her a bit...), and it's not that Roxie isn't "trying, the writing keeps reminding/telling le that, but I feel like she isn't trying trying. It doesn't show.
Like she is letting herself get caught up into all those insecurities and is shutting herself from Griffith, being even a bit passive agrgressive about it (which is totally on her!). And I really feel like giving her some though love read now. Like what the f*ck, girl?
And that's one of the reason why I think this new gym obsession is not as "healthy" as it is heralded to be. And keeping repeating how "healthy" and "glowing" she is is geeting tiring too : yet again too much "telling" not enough "showing"...Or what is showed is that she may look "healthy" because she slimmed down a bit, she she doesn't sound or behave like she is "happy". Also it peaks of a very distorted view of "health" when she is said to be "glowing" while being so lost and confused all the time...
Another problematic thing is that it seems like while being really busy with wedding planning, and physicaly active by going to the gym with some of the other BB wives, she isn't really doing anything else quite fulfilling. Like what about her career? There has been no mention of her even thinking about it. Like all she is now is a "bride", she is said to be in her element while dealing with bride stuff, etc. which adds, IMHO, to her loneliness. I don't think that if she finds a job, she won't miss Griiffth or all her problems will be solved, but that is one thing that could help her rebuild a bit of her sense of self and fight back against her insecurities. She seemed to enjoy what she was studying at school, she seemed to want to work and was passionate about that. And now, it's as if all that didn't even exist. She doesn't even have Roller Derby anymore! Like all she has now is Griffith (when he's in town), the wedding and the gym!! THIS is not healthy.
So, I am already being too long about it, but I really wanted to point out what I think are several weak points, story/plot wise. I get why she feels the way she feels, but I think it is getting a bit too long now. I don't want Roxie to turn into a stereotypical annoying passive aggressive shcisophrenic female character and this story to spiral into some "insane" drama for drama's sake kind of story.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Beysus almighty ! Thanks a lot for the last couple of chapters. I was getting so mad at the characters and were the story was going. And I am feeling so much better now ! I still think Roxie and Griffith still have a long way to come, both individually and as a couple. Mickey's action were horrible and all, but he wans't totally wrong about Griffith taking a bit of time for himself and thinking about what he wants for him. i liked how caring and supportive Griffith keep trying to be towards Roxie, but he let himself being blinded and also fought against admitting something were wrong, not just with Roxie but with the way their relationship was going. I am glad they're back on track and I am looking forward to get a pick at how they are handling it.
I'd also liek to read about that wedding assistant girl getting a karma bitch slap in her ugly face!
Now one last comment : am a bit confused about Brody : wasn't he the brother who was a truck driver?
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapters but this is getting real annoying with all the pseudo mystery surrounding Roxie's weight loss and all. It's getting quite ridiculous...I don't know, I really like the characters and all, but to make all the drama around that thing is kind of cheapening both caharcters and their relationship. And I hate ohow freaking oblivious Griffinth sound and how Roxie is reduced to sme cliché now. UGH!
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Rya, a dreamer at heart is as imaginative as her mind allows her to be. She can't wait to go off into world and live a life full of adventure. Haseem yearns for a normal safe life. After leaving a troubled past, he hopes to somehow atone for his sins and start with a clean slate. Without complications.
Would I call? TOTALLY! Thanks for the new chapter.
This is a very nice original story. At first I was doubtful about the way the all Muslim Pakistani ex terrorist thing wold be handled, but you writer, are doing a very nuanced and subtle work up until now, so I can really enjoy the story. I like "profesisonal bullshitter" Rya very much, she has a funny vivid imagination. And I like how upfront Haseem is. And their may be flirting was so sweet and kind of hot. I bet they are going to have sweet hot sex too ! Can't. Wait.
Hey! Thanks for your review. I admit at first I was like what in the hell did I get myself into? No one is going to root for someone like Haseem, but then I had to try and convince you guys right? Lol Getting into his psyche is going to be fun. I'm so glad you like Rya, she's a sweetie pie.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed A story how even though you think you have your life planned out, cupid's arrow will hit you when you least expect it. Chris and Kat both attend Tulane University. This is Chris last year and after graduation he's leaving town. But, what happens when a beautiful African American woman catches his eye?
Thnaks for the new chapter. Really like this story : it's refreshingly fun and hot. It is so not what I expected (although I am not sure what I expected). Anyway, it's a nice surprise. Good job.
Thank you so much! I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapter? Can't wait for that fucking hot love making session !
Me too! So excited about it! Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapter. Been following this story for some time and I reallylike it. I would like to see Chris and Kat story wrapped up before Chase's though. I like that Kat is so free about her sexual needs and fantasies, it's quite refreshing. But I don't think I want Kat and Chase going at it while Kat is not with Chris. It just feels icky. I hate triangles, and usually I am all for and threesome (mostly not the "sharing one woman" but the three love eache other kingd) but I can't see it with Chase and Chris "sharing" Kat (I really hate the "sharing" a woman thing...UGH!). Chase just feels like a secondary character in Chirs and Kat's story, and he deserves his own, whether it is with one or two other partners as long as the two others are not Chris and Kat. I just...really like Chris and Kat and hope after the six month hiatus, even thouh each of them is having fun with other people (expect Chase), they can build a new relationship...
RedHobo, I love Chris and Kat together too. I've had people ask me about the threesome thing. And although I love a threesome, ( this is probaably a huge writing no-no) Kat- Chris-Chase will not have a threesome and I'm starting on Chase's separate story next. His story just happens to take place during Chris and Kat's 6 month break. Thank you for following this story and your review.
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Chase James is Chris' older brother from Making It Hard For Me. Chase recently filed for divorce freeing himself from a woman he never loved. Although he would like to pursue a meaningful relationship with someone, now is not the time. With Chris starting his internship program, Chase is down a mechanic and in serious need of help. Maya has lived a sheltered life helping her father run his Auto Repair Shop until he passed away 6 months ago. Without enough customers to support the shop, Maya was forced to close it. After several months without work, she is in desperate need of a job.
I'm catching up with Chase's story. It looks promising. I like Maya ok. She is suite different from Kat, if not for the virgin status situation. The sexual dynamic is a bit much and crude though . Also I would have done with this whole "Why does it drive men to rape and some woman to become sluts?". Rape has little to nothing to do with sex or sexual attraction and "slut" shaming is so...UGH.
Thank you for reading, I appreciate the review. Kat and Maya are two very different characters. The sexual dynamic is my favorite part of writing. Maya does not reflect my particular beliefs, she is a character and as a 21 year old naive woman her curiosity about sex was peaked because her understanding of rape was that it is a forced sexual act ( I kow it is about control, but I'm not Maya), same thing about her curiosity about why women become so driven by sexual pleasure that they constantly seek it out ( shit I'd probably would be considered slutty if I wasn't married, ain't no shame in enjoying sex but again not my belief but my character Maya). Thanks for reading.
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SEQUEL to Sasha: the Wallflower. Adaline Lang is an up and coming photographer with more than her own set of problems. During her cousin's wedding she comes face-to-face with the man that she had fallen in love with as a child. Only to find out he was in love with someone else. What will she do to finally be heard and convince him that the perfect women he has been looking for is standing right in front of him?
Dominic Vikhrov is caught between a rock and a hard place. The woman he has fawned after for so many years has finally returned to the United States. But he isn't the only one who is fighting for her heart. Never one to lose, Dominic has his eye on the prize no matter the cost. But will his tunnel vision blind him to something even greater?
Thanks for the new chapter. I really like this story. But I am more and more confused about Dina's new background. From what I remembre from Sasha's story, Dina was a waitress and ahd a kid, a boy : when she met Slade she even told him about the kid and it was a test to see how he would react. So now she has a gallery and a secret baby?? It feels like abig retcon. And I am not liking theis (sub)plot in Adalaine's stroy. I am not really interested in Dina right now (especially seeing as she has been rewritten) : the cheating part is way too melodramatic, and the secret baby and secret baby daddy stuff is veering on the ridiculous side. I am way more interested in learning more about Adalaine, how she is doing at her job at the center, and how she is going to become a photograph and it feels like Dina's story is taking Adaline's one away. And please, don't make the two woman ending up working togetehr or something, and turnsit into some tringle bit.... UGH! I hate love triangles. And I really, really want the focus to stay on Adaline, rather than her to become just one corner of a cliched triangle.
Thanks for your review, RedHobo! Hmm...I don't remember writing in Dina having a kid, even in the chapters published for ValentChamber but I concede because it was a long time ago. I hope you keep reading because there is a reason for Dina's presence in this story. While a subplot, the two will be connected at a certain point and no, not in the way you are assuming (e.g., a love triangle). I am not a fan of love triangles myself so don't worry! There will be none of that. I can understand the secret baby daddy stuff seeming ridiculous because you don't have the entire story yet, but I hope you keep reading. As for the cheating, I don't find it melodramatic myself because that is just a fact of life: people cheat- emotionally and physically. Thanks for reading and your review has definitely given me something to think about! :-)
Reviewer: RedHobo Signed Thanks for the new chapter. I liked reading more about Adaline's job. It's good she get to make new friends. And maybe get some good lovin' too. Girlfirend needs some fun and action! It's nice to hear from Sasha too.
Now about that Dina's business : at least the faux mystery didn't last too long and there was no mistaken baby daddy drama. I am still so not interested in Dina though. Like the moment she appears in the chapter and opens her mouth, I can bet I am going to side-eye the hell out of her. Sh ecomes off so annoying. And I used to root for her and Slate...Now I just want Dominic to just move on already. But he shouldn't just up and fall for Adaline 'cause he would just use her as a rebound. Adaline deserves to be loved the right way and Dominic isn't there yet, if ever. I just want him to do something other than mope around that Dina woman.
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